Some Feedback?

[hyulhyulhyul]

I would appreciate some feedback on my stories if you have the time.

 

[hyulhyulhyul]

Penny Auntie

Just added a long chapter to Penny Auntie.

 

[The Mystery Valiant]

Somethings missing!

Got no feedback? Maybe because there is no link! Ppl don' critique white pages with any form of enthusiasm.

 

[hyulhyulhyul]

Got no feedback? Maybe because there is no link! Ppl don' critique white pages with any form of enthusiasm.

All of my stories are linked at the bottom of the page. Just click on "My Stories" and it will take you to them.

 

[bobocity]

"Birthday suit" didn't suit me

Hi there:

I just gave "Birthday Suit" a good read. I think technique wise, you're quite strong, but I found the situation and plot a little beyond my suspension of disbelief.

I find it difficult to get into fantasies that don't have at least a touch of plausibility, and this one was so far over the top I just couldn't buy in past the threesome action between the narrator, Lorna, and Fran.

I found Bonnie to be really unbelievable.

Not a horrible story -- but not to my taste.

 

[hyulhyulhyul]

Hi there:

I just gave "Birthday Suit" a good read. I think technique wise, you're quite strong, but I found the situation and plot a little beyond my suspension of disbelief.

I find it difficult to get into fantasies that don't have at least a touch of plausibility, and this one was so far over the top I just couldn't buy in past the threesome action between the narrator, Lorna, and Fran.

I found Bonnie to be really unbelievable.

Not a horrible story -- but not to my taste.

Thanks for your comments. The story was meant to be a bit over the top, but I realize that some people don't enjoy that.