Snibbits

[mcato]

Hello all,
I am relatively new to the site. My wife and I each joined as we explore our 50's and some newfound sexual interests/epiphanies .

I have written things I call Snibbits most of my life. Some I like, some I hate. On discovering this site, I found a possible audience to share with. So here goes.

This one is one of my favorites.

Comments always welcome. Damn Yankee is an ex-philly boy with a thick skin
(i hope)

https://literotica.com/p/moto-sex

-m

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Hello and welcome,
Well I don't know what else you'd call it, Prose poetry maybe, so I suppose your title is as good as any. Personally I don't find disjointed sentences very poetic.

 

[mcato]

Thanks Annie,
I did read some of yours! I quite like them and you have a very smooth style.

Your point is quite valid, I do tend to use fragments and I often struggle to keep a fixed 10/9 (or really any) beat.

Mostly, It's an "I cried when I wrote this song" thing and sharing them is a whole new dimension of thought for me.

I picked a couple more to share. they published one today.
https://www.literotica.com/p/lifetime-3

My wife found a sketch of an old man with a fishing pole looking at his reflection in the water from the lake shore. In the reflection was a small boy. She overlaid this snibbit on it and has if framed in a bookcase in our living room.

http://nenny.com/lifetime.jpg

-m

 

[Piscator]

Welcome to PFD from one known to handle a rod on occasion and sometimes dangle a worm in desperation when my lures don't..

 

[butters]

always good to see new posters bringing something to the table welcome

poetry doesn't have to be standardised to be poetry. and that piece of prose is very poetic, blurring the established lines. it brings light and shape and movement, scent, colour, sound, taste... subtle word-choices underly the driving imagery and i found it an engaging read, bringing something original and fresh to an age-old scenario of man+woman>man without woman. enjoyed and look forward to reading more from you.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I love that, it's so much better written out as a poem rather that the disjointed sentences you produced before. I am glad you are able to do that and any help you need, someone here will always be happy to give advice.

 

[mcato]

The next one they published

Thank you for the feedback. It was nice to be able to 'stick a toe' into the water and get some direct and constructive feedback.

Here is the last one I submitted, that the site published. In all, the three submissions represent 3 different styles that I find myself falling into. This is more of a story. They rejected it as a story due to its relative brevity, but did find acceptance in the non-erotic poetry department

Submitted for your enjoyment,
Dead Eyes.

https://www.literotica.com/p/dead-eyes-1

I have more to share in time. Some of them I remain quite shy about.

-m

 

[UnderYourSpell]

That to me is a short story and IMO writing down sentences and calling it poetry doesn't make it so, You admit yourself it was written as a story, but unacceptable because it wasn't long enough, so calling it poetry doesn't make it that either.
Anything will be accepted through the poetry channel as long as it doesn't contain banned subjects (and even some of those slip through).

 

[mcato]

i wonder if we need a new category. I can't be the only one so situated. (short attention span I guess)

I'll dig out a more poetic one for the next submission.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

You and me both, I don't even like writing long poems!

 

[mcato]

I found an old one perusing my deep archive. I was pretty young when I wrote this and I must have been stinging from one of life's early lessons.....

: o )


https://literotica.com/p/ignorance-and-understanding

 

[mcato]

Dusted off the old typewriter....

Well,
I dusted off the old typewriter and have tried my hand at a proper literotica story. I hope you all like it. The names have been changed to protect the guilty

https://literotica.com/s/kent-and-nancy-pt-01