Snail & Trail

[My Erotic Trail]

Why apologise? very good, it is Poetry and Discussion

not regurgitated consumption.
Begs a question (direct) why are you here, why are you doing this? Isn't this a code phrase, "dissection of a poem"?
Much like this:
Verbosity and Pomposity
by LeBroz ©

Verbosity and Pomposity

I knew a man
an intelligent sort
who tried to impress
with utterances multi-syllabic
I asked him to
please spare us do,
verbosity and pomposity
when a simple phrase will really do, like,
"Your head's up your ass."

© Leon Brozyna 2005

Despite the glowing comments, how about illustrating the poetry in this, ok Leon.

I do get pissed off, when someone says they will get back to me and then runs off, like thay have something to hide. Makes me prone to write:

:like thunder.
by MyNecroticSnail ©

Ponder:
an audience of bobble-heads
applaud
back fromt zephyrs
: like thunder.


I wonder.


I've already detailed the abuses in the first part in a comment. Where is the poetry, It has an interesting image. It wobbles. The first word and the last word is an imperfect rhyme almost an eye rhyme (what I see), thunder gets very interesting, doesn't it? Are you getting it?
I don't claim it is great poetry, took me all of an hour to write, edit, etc. It is an invitation to think. As in I wonder what is the criteria to merit inclusion and exclusion in your wonderful little thread. Laughs.

A partial listing of the definations of the word review

1. a critical article or report, as in a periodical, on a book, play, recital, or the like; critique; evaluation.
2. the process of going over a subject again in study or recitation in order to fix it in the memory or summarize the facts.
3. an exercise designed or intended for study of this kind.
4. a general survey of something, esp. in words; a report or account of something.
5. an inspection or examination by viewing, esp. a formal inspection of any military or naval force, parade, or the like.
6. a periodical publication containing articles on current events or affairs, books, art, etc.: a literary review.
7. a judicial reexamination, as by a higher court, of the decision or proceedings in a case.
8. a second or repeated view of something.
9. a viewing of the past; contemplation or consideration of past events, circumstances, or facts.
10. Bridge. a recapitulation of the bids made by all players.
11. Theater. revue.
–verb (used with object)
12. to go over (lessons, studies, work, etc.) in review.
13. to view, look at, or look over again.
14. to inspect, esp. formally or officially: to review the troops.
15. to survey mentally; take a survey of: to review the situation.
16. to discuss (a book, play, etc.) in a critical review; write a critical report upon.
17. to look back upon; view retrospectively.
18. to present a survey of in speech or writing.
19. Law. to reexamine judicially: a decision to review the case.
20. Bridge. to repeat and summarize (all bids made by the players).
–verb (used without object)
21. to write reviews; review books, movies, etc., as for a newspaper or periodical: He reviews for some small-town newspaper.

I draw attention to the difference between #1 and #13.

A for RJ
for a group the H-bombs itself, they sure play enough Duck and Cover

I believe you enjoy being an abrasive charactor...snail,

This thread is a new version of so many that were made in the past... such as, "Dusty Poems'

I think Leon should be praised for bringing old poems back to life! Spending the amount of time he does to display 'Old and Forgotten' poems! I don't think people duck and cover as much as they respect the right to not converse with sick minded folk, like the Indians of north america... they simply ignore those that are crazy!


an Escutcheon smile
by My Erotic Tail ©

Dimpled smile
shrouds emotions
like tranquil waters
smooth as glass
mirrors blue sky
hiding deep blues

Depths of the soul
high as a ceiling fan
swirls the mind
out of reach
blowing thoughts
chilling cold

Doors open
with tender hand
hidden motives
covered sincerly
by shielded heart
an Escutcheon smile

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

I believe you enjoy being an abrasive charactor...snail,

This thread is a new version of so many that were made in the past... such as, "Dusty Poems'

I think Leon should be praised for bringing old poems back to life! Spending the amount of time he does to display 'Old and Forgotten' poems! I don't think people duck and cover as much as they respect the right to not converse with sick minded folk, like the Indians of north america... they simply ignore those that are crazy!

Duck,
Duck
Duck and cover it up as well as you can.
Leon said it himself.
doing that type of dissection of a poem improves a reader's and writer's skills — but it still seems too much like work to me.
Praise him and you for what - the easy path. I'm sure your "Dusty Poems" was just as good in the why and what makes poetry, poetry. I give him credit for slipping in more good then bad, not making it look soooo partisan.

As far as your calling me sick,
Well, you accused DecayedAngel (and others) of shitting on poetry
The man knows more about poetry than your crowd ever will except in your dreams

accused the Rainman (and others) of being jealous
Pat has one book, with another coming out, how many do you have?

and accused me, MNS of being a coward (amoung other things) when alledgely you had 35 votes for MIP, even though I suspect much less, it is still one against what seven or eight. The number of your supporters that wound up in the top 50 list, last March. And right at the top of the list Lebroz with 40 votes. Previous to that, good writers had between 15 and 20.

You are right, I enjoy being abrasive to a sick little bitch like you, giving you a good dose of what you gave so many others. But it is beginning to bore, because it doesn't take much to outwit you and yours.

NOW, Leon was asked questions, but he Pm'ed me pointing the finger at two others for leaving lame comments, but is silent about the punkin head comments you leave. Leon was asked repeatly what he is doing, he can't answer Just drawing the links, I'm so glad you showed up.

So what are you doing Leon? Picket fence defense, with this? Trying to make it look like if I attack you, I attack these others, when you must have had at least knowledge that some of these poets where getting fucked out of the top 50 by your friends with duplicate voting, low voting. Or is a form of atonement? OCD because it is important for you leave the MOST comments?

Like your poem has been mentioned in the Archival Review, ever think of changing the name to Revue.

Just another stupid tool, who are you fooling? You two assholes (I am being generous) have nothing real to say about poetry. Not that I do, not why I'm here. Still one E, compares well with the one E your whole crowd has.

Now when are you two poetry authorities going to quit trying to fool yourselves, and the sad others who beleive in your altruism

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

Due to the selective actions of some mod

I got you alone tell-tale-trail

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Comments:

Normally, I would appreciate all constructive criticism. However,
nothing you said was constructive. Every comment I have seen from you on any
poem here has been negative. If you don't ever have anything nice to
say, why do you bother? If you ask me, you should take a look at yourself
and figure out where this God complex came from!

if you didn't do it, I would be concerned, they are using your trademark negative which you managed to steal after it was used in reference to you - Archival review of the threads

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

is there 'now' a poetry spinner? (such as the story spinner?) or is this like the thread I had; called... 'Dusty Poems'? (~_~)

inspirational ...

Hey Mod, remove this also!!!!!
This is the Leon show

How about it Leon, a line by line reveiw of the next one you pick.

 

[WickedEve]

Hey Mod, remove this also!!!!!
This is the Leon show

How about it Leon, a line by line reveiw of the next one you pick.

Behave.
Neo has his 30/30 and we do our best to respect it by not posting off topic. So, why not do the same for Leon?
Besides, you two need your own discussion thread. Mmm, feel how cozy it is in here. After I leave, you two can be all alone and... cozy.