Small Town Country Girl Becomes A Stripper in the City

[Garbo911]

I've never published a story here before so I was curious about a few things. The general idea revolves around a small town country girl seeking employment in the city. She finds that stripping earns her lots of money. Much of the plot would be about her being shy and unaccustomed to her profession.

What category this would go in if there were no sex, just nudity? Would anybody read such a story?

 

[missyunderstanding]

Anybody?

I've never published a story here before so I was curious about a few things. The general idea revolves around a small town country girl seeking employment in the city. She finds that stripping earns her lots of money. Much of the plot would be about her being shy and unaccustomed to her profession.

What category this would go in if there were no sex, just nudity? Would anybody read such a story?

You describe a 'midnight cowgirl' type story and ask if "anybody" would read it. The mathematical odds are that "somebody" would read it.

But the popularity of the story would depend on the writing skill more than the concept. Both are important but neither have legs on their own.

Write it first and then select a category. That would allow the story to develop fluidly in your imagination. If you lock in before you start writing you will have just built a corral around you imagination and greatly limiting the potential.

Regarding your question about having no sex in the story: I am not sure why that is an issue to you. However, it is not realistic. If a country girl moves to a city and starts stripping for a living she is going to get fucked. Period. So unless the story ends after she is naked in front of a group for the first time then it is going to end up being yet another unrealistic tale.

 

[Garbo911]

If a country girl moves to a city and starts stripping for a living she is going to get fucked. Period.

So sex is a must then. Got it. I will do my best to make it as hot as possible in that case.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Regarding your question about having no sex in the story: I am not sure why that is an issue to you. However, it is not realistic. If a country girl moves to a city and starts stripping for a living she is going to get fucked. Period. So unless the story ends after she is naked in front of a group for the first time then it is going to end up being yet another unrealistic tale.

You'd be shocked, she would make so much fucking bank its not even funny. To the point that the owner would be a fucking fool not to assign her a bodyguard. Men are going to throw entire paychecks at the virgin stripper. Honestly the unbelievable part is that she moved from the country and is a virgin. Nobody who lives out in those places are virgins. Thats PART of why you have stuff like Bristol Palin (not the country but for the important part of this equation it is) in LA you go to the mall, you go to a concert, take in a show. There is everything to do. When you grow up in a "one horse town" the only thing to do is each other.

 

[sirhugs]

If there is no sex, "Non-erotic" might fit, though stories can be erotic without containing sex.

But I think sex would make it a better story.

 

[Hypoxia]

Not one but TWO country girls, long-time lovers who have never entertained a cock, prove the saying, "How can you keep-em down on the farm after they've seen Paris, Texas?" They move to town and gain renown as the team of virgin strippers, finishing each dance on their raised stage with a lascivious spreading of labia to display their intact maidenheads. The crowds go wild! Virgin sluts! Wonders of the age!

They exhibit themselves in public places, too. Post in in Exhibitionist.

 

[Carnevil9]

So sex is a must then. Got it. I will do my best to make it as hot as possible in that case.

No, sex is NOT a "must." You are the author; write it the way you see it. Sex will make it more popular, of course. But only you know the story you want to tell. Tell that story, not somebody else's idea of the story.

As for category, I think Exhibitionist and Voyeur is the obvious choice.

 

[JJA122]

Missy was commenting on the circumstances that would pretty much 100% lead to at least some sex. Imagine she gets interviewed a year later on those sleazy American channels, you would raise your eyebrow if she hadn't got laid yet.

A shy (perhaps this means submissive) virgin girl, new to a strip club, very possibly arousing herself while stripping, and very possibly receiving lots of advances. Yeah...

Perhaps non of the men there are her type, or she befriends the bouncer there, of course she might develop romantic feelings towards the bouncer, but he might be gay, or as Hypoxia said perhaps she has a female lover by her side, or perhaps she is strictly lesbian, or perhaps she for some reason values her virginity.

There are plenty of stories here where the other stuff is more erotic than the sex. But that shouldn't mean anything for what you want to write. As long as it's erotic.

Exhibitionist & Voyeur.

 

[Sign54]

Can she be gay and find a female audience member hot?

 

[AvroAnson]

When you grow up in a "one horse town" the only thing to do is each other.

Are you saying this as if it is a bad thing?

 

[Jay142]

She could be reluctant to perform sexual acts in the VIP room and some customers mention it to the bouncer. The bouncer has a frank conversation with her and tells her that's how the real money is made. She can make a decent living stripping and doing lap dances but the big bucks come from handjobs and blowjobs. Even bigger bucks if she finds a sugar daddy to fuck on her own time. She needs the money and decides a girl has got to do what a girl has got to do to pay the rent.

 

[jaF0]

So sex is a must then.

No, not at all. ExVoy or Erotic Encounters could be a fit

Missy ...

... has been infesting the boards for a few weeks now. Many of us have it on Ignore.

 

[sirhugs]

Just for fun, how about reversing the idea?

have the big city stripper retire to the small country town?
what could possibly go wrong?.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Are you saying this as if it is a bad thing?

Nope. Just saying if you live in Nome Alaska some girl is gonna jump you just because you're the only dick within twenty miles. I seem to recall some governor from there preaching about premartial sex and whose daughter had two premarital kids. In LA you can be an incel trying like hell and not manage. Different worlds.

If there is no sex, "Non-erotic" might fit, though stories can be erotic without containing sex.

But I think sex would make it a better story.

I'm very nearly taking this as a challenge that I can't make it erotic as hell and skip the sex.

 

[LupusDei]

I've never published a story here before so I was curious about a few things. The general idea revolves around a small town country girl seeking employment in the city. She finds that stripping earns her lots of money. Much of the plot would be about her being shy and unaccustomed to her profession.

What category this would go in if there were no sex, just nudity? Would anybody read such a story?

It could comfortably go into Exhibitionist/Voyeur category, and could be well received there even without any sex. There's no shortage of such stories there. I would read it if it caught my interest by the title, short description and tags and might like.

I have seen stuff as mild as husband observing his own wife's breasts while she is changing in a store's changing booth trying on clothes, and that's the entire story. Well, he also did that without her explicit knowledge and mentally got off on the unlikely possibility someone else might too.

 

[sirhugs]

It could comfortably go into Exhibitionist/Voyeur category, and could be well received there even without any sex. There's no shortage of such stories there. I would read it if it caught my interest by the title, short description and tags and might like.

I have seen stuff as mild as husband observing his own wife's breasts while she is changing in a store's changing booth trying on clothes, and that's the entire story. Well, he also did that without her explicit knowledge and mentally got off on the unlikely possibility someone else might too.

see, I would say that IS sex, of the voyeuristic flavour, as he gets off. I figure that there would be an audience because I'd be part of it.

 

[jaF0]

If there is no sex, "Non-erotic" might fit, though stories can be erotic without containing sex.

But I think sex would make it a better story.

I'm very nearly taking this as a challenge that I can't make it erotic as hell and skip the sex.

That's half the sitcoms, primetime dramas and daytime soaps of the 90s.

 

[jaF0]

Just for fun, how about reversing the idea?

have the big city stripper retire to the small country town?
what could possibly go wrong?.

She finds out that the country isn't so quiet and cloistered as thought. There are private gatherings everywhere and special clubs abound. She also finds lot of 'farmer's daughters'.

 

[AvroAnson]

Nope. Just saying if you live in Nome Alaska some girl is gonna jump you just because you're the only dick within twenty miles.

(Funny but true: the Inuit -- whose range begins just a little south of Nome -- traditionally practiced 'husband exchange' -- which is often conflated with 'wife sharing' -- where bonds between family groups were strengthened by having the husbands travel to the other family that they had a communal bond with, and live there part of each year.

Everyone has strengths and weaknesses, and the Arctic can be a tough environment. It worked pretty well before the missionaries' bosses showed up. There is archival evidence -- as in reassignments due to fraternization -- that the earliest missionaries themselves were not taken aback by this cultural phenomenon.)

I know a young female pilot who spent a summer at a little town with a tiny airport at the end of the road flying tourists into the Wrangell-St. Elias-Bagnell (they call it flightseeing) in a little Cessna. At night she and her female lover partied with the other pilots and some of the tourists. Seven months after they returned home they each gave birth, which was the plan all along.

I wrote a story about the episode that I requested be put in Group but for some reason it was placed in LW instead where the jackals ripped it apart because it didn't fit their narrow view of the world.

I seem to recall some governor from there preaching about premartial sex and whose daughter had two premarital kids.

I wrote a Humor piece about this sort of a situation where a well known but anonymous female politician. A 'traditional values' type running for office, was giving a speech to voters (you gotta be over 18 to vote) about why abstinence education wasn't enough. You had to shield those under 18 from even knowing that sex existed.

The story took place in three rooms of the local high school. As the politician spoke in the auditorium her husband supervised an overcrowded babysitting service provided to parents and grandparents of the many children present in the cafeteria and gymnasium.

It was up for about five years before it was pulled for being 'underage' because Bristol Palin (never referenced in my story which took place in Montana) was.

In LA you can be an incel trying like hell and not manage.

Well, relocation is a viable option. One more likely go get someone laid than anger. Let's say that I'm 75 ...

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Thanks, everyone. So, in the last 40 years I've resided in 30 discrete cities mostly due to business opportunities. Some places I've moved to set up a business, then returned ten years later 'cause the guy who bought it from the folks we set it up for "knew better" and ran it straight into the ground. If you haven't tried changing your environment, you haven't tried everything.

Different worlds.

It has always been that way. In the Klondike and Yukon there were almost no women during the gold rush years. Prostitutes were pillars of society, well regarded and invited to serve on committees and in other civic improvement positions. (Sadly those improvements demoted them socially.) Many of these women were not, or not wholly Caucasian.

Ella Wilson was a beloved (no pun intended) African-American prostitute who was murdered during a robbery. Reputedly by a well-known Skagway thief and con-artist. The citizenry who had previously looked the other way, retrieved their pitchforks and torches. The alleged murderer went into hiding until the dust settled. He was shot dead in the streets in broad daylight the afternoon of his return to town.

 

[Garbo911]

So far I've gone 2,668 words deep into this. Turns out the main character has her first lesbian experience (technically second thanks to a country bumpkin female cousin, which I go into detail about) in the VIP room. She's a country girl from 1990s rural Georgia who goes from working at a gas station in the middle of nowhere to prancing around a pole to country & western music and getting naked, having no idea about the naughty things that can happen in a strip club, especially the VIP room.

Here's the kicker: I've got her in the VIP room with another stripper and they're 69ing in front of some rich guy, but I have no idea how to end the story. Any thoughts? There seems to be a lot of lesbianism in the story I've written.

 

[AvroAnsonXIX]

The main character has her first lesbian experience (technically second thanks to a country bumpkin female cousin, which I go into detail about) ...

Just a suggestion, cousins live at a weird address in Lit Land. They are considered Incest (or at least Taboo) by the site, so if tagged or noticed the story will go to IT where many readers don't consider cousins to belong. Were it me I'd add four more characters and ...

No, wait ... wrong advice.

Were it me, I'd make it her friend from church or her sister depending on whether or not I wanted the story in IT.

Any thoughts?

The more characters the better ...

There seems to be a lot of lesbianism in the story I've written.

Nothing wrong with that ... Maybe they (I mean she) gets their (sorry, her, gosh its hard to write in the singular) start stripping in a lesbian bar that has an amateur stripper night. Perhaps she didn't even know that it was a lesbian bar. It was just some bar that her lover (the church friend or older sister) told her about: "visiting once when (she) was in the city a couple years ago."

 

[JaxRhapsody]

No, not at all. ExVoy or Erotic Encounters could be a fit

... has been infesting the boards for a few weeks now. Many of us have it on Ignore.

Missy had some decent advice up to "a stripper is going to get fucked" paragraph.

 

[CuttingEdge]

You could write the story as you originally intended, and still have a great story.

What about if the woman came to the big city, became desperate and was stripping. Only to have a friend from back home be in the club and see her right after she starts.

But here is the thing, the club owner has a policy where the girls must appease his paying customers and when they are not happy, their is punishment for that. In this case, the woman is so put off by having to strip in front of her friend, and so much so, that another patron gets upset at her clumsy dancing. She is then taken to a back room where its just the man that feels slighted...and her.

At that point, you could have the jaded man and her have sex...or the friend saves the woman at the last second from having to sexually please the jaded patron. Now the couple are on the run from the club owner and his henchmen since he is not about to lose one of his girls who brings in lots of paying customers.

You could have a dozen hot scenes where they almost get caught, but somehow slip away.

Heck you could have it end with the two friends getting married and having children together on a hobby farm in Iowa if you want. It could still be a great story without sex, is my point.

 

[CuttingEdge]

I'll follow that up with two points:

In a great story, sex ALWAYS adds to the story line, and is not just a filler.

An example of that might be, as the pace of the story is slowed, and the friends just got away from the henchmen for a third time, are in a semi-safe place for awhile, and the woman realizes how devoted her friend is to her, to keep putting his life on the line for her. That devotion is repaid lovingly, and so it adds to the story.

An example of crappy filler sex, is if you just throw in that the couple stops running and has stand up sex in a back alley, and then get up and run again. Sex should always add dimension and depth to the characters, not be an unrealistic sex scene, because no one running for their lives is going to just stop and have sex.

 

[CuttingEdge]

I might be way off on this, so if I am, just discard, but it may be of interest to other writers...

But writing sex scenes can be daunting. It is one scene that I dread writing in my real novels, but again...I do...because it adds to the plot and characterization. I mean look at real American life. Talk to someone for ten minutes and sex is going to be broached SOMEWHERE in that conversation to some degree. So sex is natural and it is almost unnatural not to include it in a story.

If you do feel you need a sex scene and are stuck, write out the dialogue first. It really helps to set the scene, then you can go back and fill in later with the descriptor stuff. Now you got something you can follow up with.

Be bold. Often times writers block on sex scenes is because the writer is worried about saying to much, or revealing to much about their own sexual preferences, Get over it! If you like it, so will someone else. And good gracious, even the pastor's wife has some pretty disturbing sexual thoughts! Deep down inside people like to read dirty stuff!

So as difficult as sex scenes can be, you (the original poster) can write one. You really can!