Slowly Unwrapping a Present

[Hockey1963]

Hello, any good writers out there?

Now, the story: imagine the girl you’ve had a crush on for years. Since the beginning of high school you’ve been dreaming about her, thinking about what her body looks like. You’ve had a few glimpses here and there; one time she was wearing shorts and you got a glimpse of white cotton underneath. Sotimes she wears white shirts and you can make out the appearance of a modest white bra, padded with a trace of lace.

Her personality is unique. Shes very flirty and can be mischievous. That said, shes shy about her body and does NOT ever wear anything that revealing. From other people you know shes a virgin, and its very likely shes never even revealed her breasts to a guy.

Her appearance: shes 5’4”, with dark brown hair, and fairly thin but not overly skinny. She has small perky breasts as you can see. She has a fairly pale complexion although she does tan in the summer (but she still has farmer’s tan lines). She has delicate hands and feet and toes. Her arms are lightly sprinkled with small thin dark hair. She has brown, innocent eyes.

I remember when the first time I touched her. At first, when I tried to touch her breasts through her shirt and bra, she resisted, but after the fourth try, she gave in and let me. Similarly, she resisted when I started to take off her shirt, but eventually gave in. I got the feeling she wanted to do it, but was too shy and scared and needed convincing and persistence. Her stomach trembled a lot as I did it, and she breathed heavily.

Oh, and her stomach…wow…perfectly flat, with a cute innie navel with a little swirl in it, like on the cover of that movie, American Beauty (look up the pic online if youd like). She was also very sensitive and sighed and trembled all over when I kissed her there.

So anyways, heres the setting for the story: after years of waiting, this is the first chance you have with her. You are in the senior year of high school as is she. You are alone with her in your bedroom, and she has no idea what your desires are. It is after a concert and she is wearing that purple button down shirt, a long dark dress, a white slip, dark waist high pantyhose, slippers, a plain modest white bra with a bit of lace, and those innocent white cotton panties.

You desperately want her, to remove her clothes one by one, slowly revealing her body that’s been hidden from you for so long and that you’ve dreamed about. You want to caress her body through all the layers of clothing before you take them off – e.g. you caress her through her shirt, then take off her shirt and touch her breasts through the slip, and then take off the slip and feel them through the bra. Each time it feels slithly different and adds to the eroticism, not to mention you are getting closer and closer to revealing her body. The last piece to be removed are her panties, reavling her dark bush. As a climax, you gently spread apart her legs and shave the thick hair.

Please note that details are key to the story, particularly textures, shades, feelings, emotions, colors. The texture of her dress. The small bumps on her areoles of those small dark (or light? You pick what they would look like depending on the lighting) pink nipples. The feel of her bush through her pantyhose and panties. Her stomach and body trembling as she initially resists you unbuttoning her shirt. Your feelings are important too – remember, this is the most exicting moment of your life. Your fingers tremble from the excitement. Yougulp as that slip slowly falls down, revealing that bra concealing her heaving, small, innocent breasts.

Another key to the story is that she is SHY. She doesn’t like revealing her body and if you told her she was hot she would deny it. There must be an element of resistance to the story, but ultimately acceptane and arousal.

A hot possibility is that some of her clothes get removed with something sharp, like a knife or a scissors. A blindfold is also a great idea. If you want to incorporate that –there are men’s ties in the closet that could be used.
And of course, perhaps the most challenging thing – how would the erotic situation begin in the room?

Some things that shouldn’t be included: no violence. No description of male nudity other than something really brief and cursory. Remember the focus is her. She is the present to be slowly, SLOWLY unwrapped.

This is gonna be a pretty long detailed story, but hopefully one of the most erotic and best stories on the site. Are you up for the challenge? If you’d like, send me the first 4 or 5 parts, and I will edit it and send it back. I was thinking of dividing it into these parts, like chapters, and then combining it at the end
1) The set up
2) Touching the body
3) Unbuttoning and Taking off the shirt
4) Unzipping and removing the dress
5) Feeling the body again
6) Removing the slip
7) Body
8) Pantyhose
9) Bra
10) nipples
11) feeling her bush through her panties
12) panties removed
13) bush
14) conclusion

Anyone who is interested, I will privately send a pic or two of the girl to write about, such that even more details can be added to the story.

Thanks all

 

[sirhugs]

lots of good writers around....snoops is even a pro.

I won't speak for anyone else, but I don't write to order. Though I shameless borrow publicly available ideas here, I find that I have too many plots, not too few most of the time.

I suggest two ideas if no one takes you up on this thread:

1) write it yourself. You clearly have thought this out thoroughly. Any of us would likely disappoint you by not 'getting it right'. Don't be afraid to try. All of us were new once. Volunteer editors will help.

2)if you are just unable to write, cruise the story side looking for similar stories. Contact writers directly.

good luck.