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PhoenixPrime01
Hmm, so many choices.
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OOC:
See my post to you in the New to Lit thread.
Please don't take offense as I'm just trying to help you. Here's what you wrote and how it should look in English. That's what the suggestion in New to Lit.
*In ther dark bar, i c the bootyfool indian wiman dresd in a sari siting on her one. Goeng ofa, i taik a seet nekt tu her*
Hello *i sed tu her* I m John. Wood yu liek a drink?
~~~
In the dark bar, I see the beautiful Indian woman dressed in a sari sitting by herself (in place of "on her one" I think), I take a seat next to her.
"Hello," I said to her, "I'm John. Would you like a drink?"
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I hope that helps to explain what I meant in the New to Lit post. See the difference?
See my post to you in the New to Lit thread.
Please don't take offense as I'm just trying to help you. Here's what you wrote and how it should look in English. That's what the suggestion in New to Lit.
*In ther dark bar, i c the bootyfool indian wiman dresd in a sari siting on her one. Goeng ofa, i taik a seet nekt tu her*
Hello *i sed tu her* I m John. Wood yu liek a drink?
~~~
In the dark bar, I see the beautiful Indian woman dressed in a sari sitting by herself (in place of "on her one" I think), I take a seat next to her.
"Hello," I said to her, "I'm John. Would you like a drink?"
****
I hope that helps to explain what I meant in the New to Lit post. See the difference?
