Shameless self promotion and begging

[Dirty Old Man]

one of my stories has gotten good scores, but since it's older than the scripts, there are only three votes. It needs seven more. -- please? Pretty please?

Just click here: Two Bags For The Bride

 

[Mr_Neb]

Only so that Dirty Old Man doesn't feel alone here, I would also appreciate your consideration for my stories submitted before the new scripts went in. Specifically:

Veronica's Story
Her Turn
Away From Home
La Jolla
The Other Time of the Month

Thanks

Mr. Neb

 

[KillerMuffin]

Mr. N, I is a lazy lil ol muffin. Would you please put the links in? I'm lazy lazy lazy. Otherwise I'd click, read, and vote. Searching is just too much effort.

Aw hell, just click here for Mr. Neb's stuff.

Away From Home
Her Turn
La Jolla
The OTHER Time of the Month
Veronica's Story

 

[KillerMuffin]

Ooooops.... I forgot to jump on Dirty Old Man's bandwagon....

Can I shamelessly pander and beg for votes on the old stuff too please? Pretty please? I voted for yours already (this makes twice, once in the old scripts once in the new scripts). Thank you! I have to kiss your what? Are you going to wash it first? Ooooh, not that kind of dirty... that kind of dirty... I adore that kind of dirty.

Stories:
Alexandra's Odyssey Ch. 1
Alexandra's Odyssey Ch. 2
Alexandra's Odyssey Ch. 3

Poem:
Burning

[Edited by KillerMuffin on 01-16-2001 at 09:37 AM]

 

[Guest]

Ok, here's an idea. Why don't all us old-timer's do a vote swap (people who had stories posted before the new programs that they think deserve more attention)? I don't mean give everybody straight 5s. I mean vote how you would vote anyway so that at least some of those stories can qualify for the top lists if they get more than ten votes.

If you feel like it you can include reasons for why you voted the way you did. I think it'd be good to know what other author's think of our writing.

I've just given Weird Harold's story a 4. I thought it was well-written and funny but the attitude of the male characters sometimes comes across as more mysoginistic than humorous and there's a tendency for the characters to repeat each other's names a little too much in places. If it hadn't been for those aspects I probably would've given it a 5: Two Bags For The Bride

Ok, I'm going off now to read some of Mr Neb's and Killer Muffin's work. Here are links to my stories:

GO FASTER! - In a speeding car in the Scottish Highlands, a Texan rock star guides a young English Rose on a journey to discover her inner-slut.

I DREAM OF MARIA, DOWN IN THE SAND - A masturbating woman fantasises about a lesbian encounter with a nasty Brazilian.

ABBY BRIGHT'S QUIET NIGHT IN - Two couples share a quiet night in that escalates into a brazen home-movie orgy-fest.

RACHEL PICABIA: MISS BABYLON, 1997 (chapter 1) - Rachel fantasises, masturbates and remembers her first time.

RACHEL PICABIA: MISS BABYLON, 1997 (chapter 2)

RACHEL PICABIA: MISS BABYLON, 1997 (chapter 3)

[Edited by Roger Simian on 01-16-2001 at 09:32 AM]

 

[Guest]

Just read Veronica's Story by Mr Neb. It's excellent - very descriptive and erotic. The female protagonist, damaged by her job as a stripper, is very believable. There were quite a lot of typos and spelling mistakes that kind of distracted me from the story a bit but I gave it a 5.

 

[Guest]

Killer Muffin. I gave one of your stories a 5 and your poem a 3. I wasn't as keen on Burning. It's very sensual but I'm just not very good with poetry. I'm a bit of a philistine as far as poems are concerned. There are very few of them that I like - some WB Yeats, Sylvia Plath, Ted Hughes, ee cummings and that's probably about it. I have to admit I prefer prose so I'm not the best person to judge your talents in that field. Sorry about that.

I thought that the first chapter of Alexandra's Odyssey was excellent, though - very erotic, with good description and dialogue. The two characters are really likeable, which always helps draw me into the story, and the sex scenes were hot and vivid. I'm looking forward to checking out the other two chapters.

 

[KillerMuffin]

Thank you Roger, you have a pretty good idea there, about the older stories thing. I fear the other two AO's aren't as good as the first was... *sigh*

DOM, I love the story, you got two nipples up on that one. And another 5 from moi.

Roger, you got a four, there isn't a 4.5, for Go Faster because the way you formatted it kept me from getting deeply into the characters, two paragraphs from her, a row of **** a couple of paragraphs from his perspective. The switching was too fast. The only other problem I had was that the guy just didn't feel Texan. If I were to give him a state, I'd say California. California, rock star, just makes sense to me. The slow Texas drawl feel wasn't there either. I don't think I've ever heard a Texan use the word "minx" before.

I liked the sex though, and the way he teased her, I just wish there'd been more to it. It was more teasing than cruel in my estimation, and I think that's the way it was heading. Other than being denied participation in the activities, there wasn't any cruelty involved. He didn't seem to be all that mean.

 

[Guest]

Thanks for voting, KM. It was actually really good to hear your critique. I've never got round to sending my stories to the Editors (I guess I'm just too impatient to get on with it and get them posted. Haha.), so it was interesting to hear another writer's views on 'Go Faster!'.

If I ever decide to go in and work on it some more I'll take all those points into consideration.

The only other problem I had was that the guy just didn't feel Texan. If I were to give him a state, I'd say California. California, rock star, just makes sense to me. The slow Texas drawl feel wasn't there either. I don't think I've ever heard a Texan use the word "minx" before.

Haha. I take full responsibility for the word "minx" but I must hurl some of the blame for the whole Texan thing Weird Harold's way. When the story was originally posted (under the name Rachel Picabia) that character was a New Yorker but WH thought he seemed more Texan.

By the way, Chapter 3 of MISS BABYLON only needs one more vote to qualify, if anyone's interested in checking it out. (As far as I remember, you don't necessarily need to read the other two first.)

 

[KillerMuffin]

Well just oh my gawwwwwd. I loved that one! I voted, on my way to check out the rest.

 

[Guest]

Oh, cool. I'm glad you liked it, KM.

Thank you Roger, you have a pretty good idea there, about the older stories thing. I fear the other two AO's aren't as good as the first was... *sigh*

I have to disagree. I think they're really good, and for different reasons. Chapter 2 is funny and very hot. Chapter 3 is very moving, almost disturbing at points, but that's good. I think it works well the way Alexandria "reclaims her orgasm". The darker elements kind of tie it all in with the way the story starts, 'cause I was wondering by the end of Chapter 1 if you were going to leave that side of things as a loose end. Straight-As (well, 5s, anyway).

 

[Guest]

Oh, excellent behaviour! We've managed to get ourselves to 2nd and 3rd place in Erotic Couplings, KM. It's the first time I've seen the view from up there - quite breath-taking. Of course, it won't last. By tomorrow they'll have sussed me out and sent me back down to the kitchens.

 

[KillerMuffin]

Shame on them if they do! You write wonderfully.

 

[Guest]

conspiracy theories

Ah, I knew that would happen. Somebody's knocked me from a 4.60 to a 4.27. Not be too long till I'm slaving over a hot stove again. (Any of you statisticians know what score that 11th one was and what it all means? I can't count, but I'm pretty sure it must be way below the average of the votes I got previous to that.) Am I being paranoid? Probably, but that happened with my latest story, 'The Best Show Yet', too. I had 35 pretty good votes that put me in the top 40 in the Group Sex list. Two more votes sent me spiraling back into oblivion. Abby Bright's Quiet Night In has got a score of 4.56 and 9 votes. One more reasonable vote should (I think) at least put it onto the first page of the Group Sex list. I wonder how long that would last. I can see why Debz got so pissed off with the whole thing.

 

[Guest]

Ah, that cheered me up. 'Best Show' got to number 2 in Group Sex and my first attempt at a celebrity story, Madonna: The REAL Girlie Show got posted today with an E (under the name Alexander Tzara). Thanks Laurel, you little sweetie.

Go check out Mr Neb's Away From Home It's excellent - evocative, sensual and hot.

 

[Deborah]

LMFAO Snotsquatch! That is one fucking funny Madonna story.

For the sequel and the "Justify Your Love" new line of intimate bedroom toys, you could do something like this ...

http://www.divine-intervention.com/

But instead of dildos that look like biblical figures, they should look like everyone who Madonna ever fucked. You know, Sean Penn, Warren Beatty, etc., etc., etc.

BTW, if you had 10 votes and a rating of 4.60 and went to 11 votes and a rating of 4.27, you got one 1 vote. The math is easy. Just ask if your fried brain needs help, honey.

 

[Guest]

Why, thankyou, Missy Deborah. Good to see your butt back on Lit.

Re your statistical analysis:
AHA! I'm not the brightest ticket in the box (although I've got a heart of gold) but even I could see there was Something Rotten in the State of Denmark. (Sorry, Xander (USA) & ShyDood - it's just a literary turn of phrase.)

I checked out your link but I think thet're rebuilding the site or something. I get the idea though. Maybe Missy Ciccone could market a new line of licky-licky vibro-tongues embossed with the image of that aesthetically-challenged lesbian waitress that used to be on 'Roseanne'.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

I think this is a great idea. I too, shall check out some of this work and voice my opinion. After all, writers do deserve feedback, good or bad. It is through feedback, that we become better writers and learn through our mistakes. I value the opinion of others. The first three stories I have here are my rewrites, submitted only recently. But, I have had the originals up for a long time now. I am glad to say though, that the newest versions have replaced them. Would love to hear what my readers think...pretty please? Oh, added Summer's too, what the heck!

Oh, one more thang, in putting my revisions up as new again, I lost all my current votes, so back to the beginning for me!


Hugs KitKat


The Fantasy

The Cabin One

The Cabin Two

Summer's Day

[Edited by Katerina Val-Kyrie on 01-20-2001 at 06:19 AM]

 

[Guest]

Katerina. I gave you two 4s for The Cabin Chapter 1 and Chapter 2. I don't usually read things in the Romance category but I think the way you've done them works really well.