Shameless begging for reads

[FallingToFly]

Not votes- although those are nice.

I submitted something like ten pieces in one day- four came out today. Thanks to so many popping up at once, they've hardly gotten read at all, and well...

Okay, I admit this, with shame. I'm one of those writers who needs to know how others think of somethign to keep going on it, so I'm begging for HONEST feedback. If you hate it, please tell me why. If you like something, that's good to know as well. So, I'm begging for reads, and hopefully commentary. Even if it's just- "Don't know if I like it- what happens next?" I'll take it. I have another ten waiting to go up as soon as everything still pending has posted, but I need to start with the tweaking and next sections on what I'm already starting to put up.

Links are in sig, and please, feel free to add begging for reads for your own stuff. I'll read anythign except incest (Not wild about LW, but I can give it a shot.)

FtF

 

[buxxxom]

Okay, will read, vote, and comment. Promise. May take a day or two, though.

 

[FallingToFly]

Okay, will read, vote, and comment. Promise. May take a day or two, though.

*pouncehugsnuggle*

Honestly, votes are nice- feedback is GOD.

*goes to read buxxom's stuff*

 

[cloudy]

Will see what I can do tomorrow, Flying.

Tonight I have a shitty headcold.

 

[FallingToFly]

Will see what I can do tomorrow, Flying.

Tonight I have a shitty headcold.

*offers hugs and eucalyptus-ginseng green tea*

 

[Nasha]

Hi, FtF,

I read your "Impossible Gifts." Your write well. The plot is intriguing, and there are loads of wonderful images in this opening installment, and you make them work for the story, creating mood and building character, rather then just jamming them in for the sake of it.

Although I am curious where the story is going--what they were doing with Celeste at the institution, and what the significance of the "impossible gifts" will be--ultimately, I found my attention waning a bit as I read. I think things could be tightened up a bit, to keep the pace a little more engaging (and believe me, as I write that, I'm sitting here telling myself to take my own advice). Is every descriptive passage necessary? Is every scene, every bit of action and dialogue necessary to build the story you're telling? If there's anything in there that isn't doing work for the story, take it out. One area I think you have room to trim is the scenes where you follow Jamie around between his encounters with Celeste.

Overall, though, really well done.

I hope that's helpful.

-Nasha

 

[Alexandra1979]

Dear Falling,

I do plan to read your stories. However, I have none of my own for you to read. And it may take some time. But if you could read Chris's stuff some time, that would be cool. He only has 3 stories out right now.

 

[ChristopherMaxwell]

I do plan to read your stories. However, I have none of my own for you to read. And it may take some time. But if you could read Chris's stuff some time, that would be cool. He only has 3 stories out right now.

Thank you, baby.

And I shall check them out, too, Falling....

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Sure, I'll check 'em out....and give feedback. Just give me some time, sweetie.

I have a few that can use reviews, but my main one is Chapter 3 of "Calahan's Campaign", almost finished but presently stalled. That would mean more than any others, if you took a look when finished and posted.

 

[starrkers]

I read "The Ghost Made Me Do It". Thoroughly enjoyed it, am looking forward to Ch2. I'm not a horsey person at all, but the descriptive passages with the stallion were beautiful.

 

[jomar]

What Serverusmax said.

 

[FallingToFly]

Glee! It just so happens all my plans for today were cancelled, so guess what? I'm going to be reading all day, and working on my next batch (although I still have so much pending...) of submissions.

Just a note, since I haven't been able to get into my email for long enough to reply to all the wonderful feedback given by several people:

THANK YOU!!! I actually managed to get revisions/corrections on everything except IG done last night, and the corrected versions will be submitted today sometime. Because of the kind of write/editor I am, I mis those little things so often- and you guys have helped me fix that. Thank you!!

 

[DG Hear]

Why?

Not votes- although those are nice.

I submitted something like ten pieces in one day- four came out today. Thanks to so many popping up at once, they've hardly gotten read at all, and well...


Links are in sig, and please, feel free to add begging for reads for your own stuff. I'll read anythign except incest (Not wild about LW, but I can give it a shot.)

FtF

FTF, Why would you submit so many stories at once? I, like many of the others will get around to reading them only because you asked.

You might want to consider in the future to submit a story say every two days. It gives the readers time to absorb your stories.

If it was only your stories on your own blog, it would be different. With so many writers on Lit, most people will try to read different authors. Everyone gts tired of reading after awhile and that takes away from your story if readers are rushing to get through.

Since you asked, (in such a polite way) I'll do my best to give honent opinions. It's the only kind I can give.
DG Hear

 

[FallingToFly]

FTF, Why would you submit so many stories at once? I, like many of the others will get around to reading them only because you asked.

You might want to consider in the future to submit a story say every two days. It gives the readers time to absorb your stories.

If it was only your stories on your own blog, it would be different. With so many writers on Lit, most people will try to read different authors. Everyone gts tired of reading after awhile and that takes away from your story if readers are rushing to get through.

Since you asked, (in such a polite way) I'll do my best to give honent opinions. It's the only kind I can give.
DG Hear

Good question, DG:

I can only submit stories when I have about 30 minutes to devote to the project per story. Because I do my own HTML in the text I have to go through and doublecheck that, lots of little details that have to be checked over before I can actually hit submit (And I still screw it up sometimes, lol) So, why I had four go up at once- they were all submitted within about a three day period where I actually had the time to do it. Because of Earth Day, I think, they were ignored for a week, and then all 4 posted on the same day. I still have others pending >.< Scary Thought.

And of course, today while doing my reading I'm also submitting two more that need to go up, plus further chapters on things like Ghost and IG. No rest for the wicked...

ETA: Originally I thought I had put them all up in one day, I noticed that I said that in the first post. Looking back at my notes this morning I saw that I submitted six one day, three the next and one the day after that. So- oops. I bopped myself in the head for being an idiot, and apologies for the discrepancies.

 

[CeriseNoire]

I just read Impossible Gifts 00-05 and left you a quick PC, but I wanted to give you some more detailed comments.

First I found your beginning strong. It really drew me in. I also liked all the dialog. It's one of my weaknesses, and I found yours well done.

On the other side, your first italics paragraph showed a few problems for me. There was a small spelling error that caught my attention(where instead of were), but in a 3-page story, that's really minor. However, that paragraph showed a few instances of tense inconsistencies. I was also a bit lost in the time line. You state at one point that she is "on the brink of adolescence", and I didn't get the idea of time passing between then and the time she says she is 22 (maybe I just missed something). Also, I felt that perhaps a section break was needed after the Hail Mary, only because of the elapsed time.

Finally, you did really well as far as building suspense and anticipation. You created characters that make me want to read more and find out how it works out for them.
OK, I'm done rambling here. I hope this is the kind of feedback you were looking for.

ETA: I'll work my way through the other stories later

 

[Skip1934a]

I'm reading them all with a critical eye, but may send my comments via email rather than here. IG, as you know, is my favorite story, having read the original version through all you had written at the time. The rewrite does have some typos and other small glitches, but nothing that really detracts from the reading in any significant way. I don't know why you discontinued allowing me to beta read for you, but I guess you have your reasons. I'd still like to do that. STRONG HINT.

I like Wicked Ways, too, because it is a new genre for me, and I'm intrigued by your word images in fairyland.

How to Marry a Rockstar doesn't appear to be drawing many public comments at last check (yesterday), but I see potential in that one that I didn't expect to see.

The ghost story is also appealing, and new to me in genre. I don't usually read them, but yours is compelling. I think it's your way with words that drew me in.

Have you stopped using an editor? It seems so for these recent posts, because there are a few typos that a spell check would catch in some of them.

I'll be reading the third post of IG today. As a critic, since you asked.

ETA: I sent an email to your FtF account with my remarks on IG 11-15