Shameless authoress seeks feedback

[Blue_shoes1980]

My 4th story just came up. I'd like to know if I'm doing it right. Sure, I get lots of positive feedback ("You're hot!" "I'd like to fuck you!" "Can I be in your next story?") but that's because I'm a girl............

Should I continue writing? I'm not totally in for the stroke value...........that, I can get from the boards! I want to know if I'm writing well.

My link is in my signature. Try one, or all my stories, if you like.........and let me know, honestly. Okay? Thanks!

Blue_

 

[kbate]

You should definitely keep writing. I think you should change your characters a bit, several stories sound very similar ( a weakness of my own writing).

The sex is ok, if not my type. The writing is good, if not excellent. Grammar is good, not perfect - usage is good, not astounding. etc... average to good overall and definitely worthy of continuation and further work.

 

[Blue_shoes1980]

Thanks, kbate, for the honest criticism. Well, my characters are all real, so it's going to be a while before I change them around! Right now, my 'freak' is on writing about my own experiences, but I anticipate that later I'll branch out into fictional writing, if enough people like my writing, and want to read what I have to say.

I'll pay more attention to grammar and usage. It's tough to write about sex without sounding hackneyed, but I try to make it interesting.

Thanks again! I'll look for your stories, and leave some feedback also.

Blue_

 

[Blue_Sky_]

I've read your stories from the beginning. The first one kind of shocked me, relationship wise, because you portrayed such an explosive situation. I wasn't sure if it was fact or fiction but you had me on the edge of the chair to find out what would happen next. (Don't exactly know if you ever revealed that).

That first story was just seemed to pour out in a raw rush.

Since then I feel you've developed much more finesse in your language, your buildup and your storytelling. I believe I spotted several clever turns of phrase as my eyes raced over each hot line of your last two adventures. And, oh yes, I did feel your heat. I also loved the way you portray yourself as an adventuress and seductress in this last story. You definitely seduced me.

You're an author I always look for, so please keep writing.

 

[Blue_Sky_]

P.S. You're the only author I can think of who can put condoms in the story and make them seem sexy.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

You will do well as a writer as time goes on. I agree with Kbate with one addition: Your stories as a whole have an immaturity about them. Your characters have a kind of childlike something about them that says they are not really quite ready for adulthood yet. That is not necessarily bad. It's refreshing, in fact. But, over time, as you gain experience, your characters need to grow up.

Just my two cents.

JJ

 

[Blue_shoes1980]

P.S. You're the only author I can think of who can put condoms in the story and make them seem sexy.

Thanks! That's a sweet thing to say, along with your other compliments. (I insist on their use, these days. The first few times, I was so hot for a hard dick I'd do anything, but once I realized I didn't really have to try to score guys, I began to think with my brain! They're not sexy......not really. But they're a real part of my life when I'm with anyone other than my husband or his father, so I include them in my storytelling.)

Glad I could seduce you! And thank you again.

Blue_

 

[Blue_shoes1980]

You will do well as a writer as time goes on. I agree with Kbate with one addition: Your stories as a whole have an immaturity about them. Your characters have a kind of childlike something about them that says they are not really quite ready for adulthood yet. That is not necessarily bad. It's refreshing, in fact. But, over time, as you gain experience, your characters need to grow up.

Just my two cents.

JJ

Thanks for your honest criticism, JJ! I suppose I AM immature.....certainly as a writer. That's why I asked for your opinions. I really do value them, and I will begin reading your stories as soon as I can, and see where you're coming from.

*adding your two cents to my writing fund!*

Thanks again!

Blue_

 

[playbook]

I have read your story and I liked your writing style. You should keep writing.

 

[Blue_shoes1980]

I have read your story and I liked your writing style. You should keep writing.

Thank you, playbook. I've gotten many nice PM's and emails as well as the comments on this thread, and yours says it succinctly and positively. I appreciate your time.

Blue_

 

[wordofvirtue]

"my husband or his father" ?

whoa

head spins
head spins

sooooooo much potential there...............

WoV

 

[zukethecuke]

I've read your first (father-in-law) and last (Panera/stockroom) stories so far.

You're pretty good! As a writer, I mean. There was some bizare punctuation in the first one, but nothing painful. And we ALL have trouble finding ways to describe the tiny but important variations in what is, after all, a very repetative act. I look forward to reading more!

 

[Masterofsmiles]

Write because...

It feels a need inside you. Don't worry about what others think of your writings.

As time goes on you will find your writing will get better

 

[zukethecuke]

OK, I'm all caught up -- I've even read the story you posted today.

Wonderful!

Thanks for sharing your memories with us.