sex with mud

[rclemeny]

clay ravishes a young woman
who was only walking home

but not really
maybe she wanted the clay
maybe she teased

rubbing mud up her ankles
and washing it off in the puddles
in the light rain

taking off her wet shoes
everything wet
anyway,
sinking her toes into

grey sandy pools
and suction
holding her as she wrenches them out

and splatters droplets all up her thighs
up to her eyebrow (which she wipes off, and looks at, and tastes (it tastes earthy))

stripping off her skirt, panties
sinking to her knees
stripping of her shirt

the awkward bra into the pooling silt

and rubbing mud all over her breasts
with awkward violence
all over anything soft and exposed, rising with a "thwock" as the clay
would pull her down into the warm (still warm) earth
rolling in the slick, perverted

and then just thrusting
her hips into the mud
which accepts her, and wraps up and around her ass, and flows into
that ass cleavage and sucks her down
thigh deep sucking
sticking her hands down to her pussy
to feel the warm pulling pulse
and fucking the clay

fucking against the pressure and pull, arching her back
mud streaming off her tits in little rivers from the raindrops

hair matted and hanging into the mud
totally bowed
orgasm in the mud
sucking in and out of her
dripping out of her

as legs float up

and she is horizontal on the surface of the mud, supported

clothes in bushes and puddles around her

still light rain

sky light still visible even though her eyes are closed

so easy

 

[Maria2394]

Hi, and welcome to the poetry forum

I have read a couple of your works and wanted to ask you..

do you want feedback and suggestions, or are you just posting them here?

I like this one best so far. You have captured some very vivid images and sounds in your poem. I think you maybe could tighten it up a little bit, lose the parenthesis, it does have potential. If you dont intend to change it, it is entertaining as is.



maria

 

[rclemeny]

Please, post feedback about the ideas, emotions, plot, phrasing etc...

I'm not looking to be published for wide audiences, more looking to write and expirence the readers.

 

[champagne1982]

Please, post feedback about the ideas, emotions, plot, phrasing etc...

I'm not looking to be published for wide audiences, more looking to write and expirence the readers.

rclemeny, you can submit your poems to lit through your author index and options page. You find them on your Login page.

 

[RhymeFairy]

I love the title and some of the imagery here.
Just the idea of sex and mud tends to lead
to some pretty dirty thoughts eh ~

Good luck on your writing and submitting.

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give us a holler there are some great writers here
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