Sex with boyfriend's ex-girlfriend and her friend

[danicanuck]

Hello,

I have this idea that I am trying to write but struggling to do, so I would love it if someone else gave it a shot too. My BF has this ex from years ago that was a stripper. She is the stereotypical stripper with big breasts and is very wild sexually. Her whole lifestyle revolved around the club, drinking and doing drugs and hooking up with the sleaziest men and sometimes women. From time to time we run into her and yes I have a jealous streak in me when it comes to her because I just don't trust that she would not try to steal my BF back or for just a one night stand. The last time we ran into her she was with this guy who turned out to be the club manager where she used to work, she apparently still hangs around there though she no longer dances. My BF recognized him from long ago and told me after that he was a real pig and was the last straw in their relationship. He used to work bar and always chatted her up and started getting her into drugs like ecstasy and cocaine. When they broke up the guy wasted no time and was having sex with her all the time. My BF heard all about it from other people as she would tell anyone that would listen what they did in great detail. So my fantasy has my BF and my best friend out having a great time when we run into her again. I am drunk enough not to care and having too much fun to be jealous and angry toward her. She is being exceptionally nice to us all and invites us back to her place for more drinks. Somehow a discussion starts about stripping, she starts telling me I could do it which makes my BF and friend laugh because I am normally much more reserved. Things get more heated in the conversation until my BF mentions how he would love to see me do a show. His ex gets an idea about inviting the club manager over to see me dance like an audition (while my BF and friend would hide in the bedroom and watch). It continues spiraling out of control as my BF has agreed to it and she has already called him. He comes over with his ecstasy and I take it with her again not how I normally act. I strip for him and find out how big of a pig he is. My BF has already decided to let whatever happen thanks in part to my friend encouraging him. The guy treats me like one of his bitches and takes me hard while my BF's ex loves it. She gets into the action too fingering me and licking me and to my surprise she has a strap on and knows how to use it.

Thoughts or takers?

Dani
xoxox

 

[Sean Renaud]

First I'm sure you hear this all the time but paragraphs are your friend. Even if you aren't sure where to put the break just pick a spot and dash em in every five to seven sentences if all else fails.

The idea isn't bad. I would go into more detail about yourself though since you seem to be the main character of this story. We don't know a whole lot why you act the way you do or who you are and the entire story kinda hinges on who you are.

We've got your boyfriend who's almost an entire non-entity at this point. The story could very easily cut him entirely and you end up meeting the Ex in a club as you wonder how you're going to make rent without his half of the money since he's moving out. I only suggest this because you've got a lot of moving parts and in a story it's usually best to cut anything that isn't helping the story along. You know, it's the same basic reason why nobody has parents, sibling, neighbors or even jobs until/unless they become important.

The manager probably needs some more details as well. Names would probably help a lot just so we can start defining them. But I like the basic concept you've got.

 

[PerilEyes]

Does ex have a malicious intent to get you drunk/high/wired/fucked/way out of your comfort zone? Seems like you might've alluded to it in not feeling threatened or jealous of her. Maybe she gets back at you for taking her too lightly.

 

[RiversEdge2010]

Lots to still consider.

There’s an interesting idea here certainly, but there’s still a lot that needs to be answered or addressed.

What is your boyfriend doing in the bedroom while this is all happening? You say he is with your best friend. Presumably they are both watching you and getting turned on, but how do you feel about leaving your boyfriend in such a sexually arousing situation with your best friend? Do you mean for them to get together in some way? You say that she is cheering you on and has convinced your current boyfriend to let things get out control. Does she have a thing for you? Your boyfriend has already seen his ex naked and has had sex with her of course, but what about your friend? Do they discover each other’s bodies for the first time or touch each other, and if so… how does that make you feel specifically? Are they not supposed to hook up/join in later? They seem very absent from the story as it is which seems to only focus on you, your boyfriend’s ex, and this sleazy boss of his. They need to play into it a little more I think.

What is your boyfriend’s ex’s motivation for watching her boss degrade you? Is it that you’ve gone to the club and have seen her naked? And further more, the idea of having sex with your boyfriend’s ex, while enticing, should have a clear motivation. Most girls would run screaming or dump their boyfriends if their ex tried to convince them to have a sexual experience of any kind with/in front of them. What makes you do it specifically? Maybe just the thought of another girl pleasing your man turns you on enough, or maybe you stumbled across a sex tape they made and you can’t get the thought of him/her doing it out of your head?

How far were things suppose to go? Were you just agreeing to strip? What convinces you to ultimately let this guy fuck you like a whore… especially in front of your boyfriend’s ex. Once the ex starts to join in with you, how does your boyfriend and best friend come into play in the story? Does your boyfriend come out and fuck your ex, you, or maybe your best friend in front of/beside/with you… or all three or none? Also… how does it end? What’s the climax?

 

[danicanuck]

Good feedback about the moving parts in the story and could be better if simplified. Imagine that I got the message even with the sarcastic tone of your first sentence.

Taking what you said into consideration I (Dani) could meet up with Carrie (my BF's ex) at the bar close to where I live after having a fight with Jay (BF). She is being very nice to me and instead of my usual reaction to her I am appreciating the kindness. After a few drinks I open up a little to her as to why I have always been so cold to her, some insecurity with her being a stripper, her experiences with Jay etc. She has made me feel boring and kind of a prude.

As we drink Carrie does her best to build me up, complimenting my looks and saying I could be a dancer if I wanted. She tells me how exciting it was for her and a couple of her crazier stories. I confide in her I have fantasized about it and that is when she gets the idea of calling Mike the manager of the club she used to work at. She has a history with him that I know about thanks to Jay telling me so I know he is very sleazy. I am reluctant at first but she convinces me to go with her to his apartment for a few more drinks.

At the apartment it is both of them complimenting me and I am feeling a lot of pressure. He pulls out the drugs and they both do it, I go along not even knowing it was ecstasy I was taking. I've lost control and do what they want which includes stripping for them. New twist to the story could be them taking explicit pictures of me while I get undressed. Now they both do what they want with me while again still getting photos with me in various positions.

When they are done with me Carrie's true motivation comes out as she sends Jay the pictures in hope of breaking us up or they both blackmail me with them and I end up working at the club and being their toy whenever they want.

With respect to our details here goes:

I'm (Dani) 5'9" and 135lbs with straight blonde hair past my shoulders and I have blue eyes. My breasts are 34B so not big but firm and perky. I have long legs and according to Jay a nice ass.

Carrie is 5'10 and 155lbs with light brown hair to the shoulders and green eyes. You can tell her hair has been dyed a lot but is still nice and has some curl to it. She has large DD breasts and a curvy figure.

Mike is a big guy, handsome with a cocky look to him. He is 6'2" and over 200lbs. He has short dark brown hair and brown eyes. He has broad shoulders and a thick chest which I find attractive. According to what I have heard about him he is well hung (8 inches) and very aggressive.

First I'm sure you hear this all the time but paragraphs are your friend. Even if you aren't sure where to put the break just pick a spot and dash em in every five to seven sentences if all else fails.

The idea isn't bad. I would go into more detail about yourself though since you seem to be the main character of this story. We don't know a whole lot why you act the way you do or who you are and the entire story kinda hinges on who you are.

We've got your boyfriend who's almost an entire non-entity at this point. The story could very easily cut him entirely and you end up meeting the Ex in a club as you wonder how you're going to make rent without his half of the money since he's moving out. I only suggest this because you've got a lot of moving parts and in a story it's usually best to cut anything that isn't helping the story along. You know, it's the same basic reason why nobody has parents, sibling, neighbors or even jobs until/unless they become important.

The manager probably needs some more details as well. Names would probably help a lot just so we can start defining them. But I like the basic concept you've got.

 

[Sean Renaud]

First things first. This was worlds easier to read than your original post.

All the details are pretty much here now. The build works better with your boyfriend and the extra friend eliminated as someone else seemed to suggest. I don't know if I could work with this but this is a damn good outline you've got going here.

 

[i_would]

We've got your boyfriend who's almost an entire non-entity at this point. The story could very easily cut him entirely and you end up meeting the Ex in a club as you wonder how you're going to make rent without his half of the money since he's moving out.

Having bf and best friend out there gives room for more plot development, especially if the story is supposed to move beyond this strip-and-lesbian-fuck scene.

Reluctance, or maybe the opposite, knowing that they're watching while she strips and later is fucked with the strap-on.

As another poster said: what happens in that room? The bf and friend have to get physically close to look through that keyhole in the door. Can't avoid some potentially awkward touching, and that within a highly sexually charged environment.

What's the whole situation doing to their relationship?

 

[Sean Renaud]

You're not wrong. I would just suggest keeping moving parts to a minimum. The added room for growth is made up primarily of extra room for things to get bogged down and you can always introduce them later if they are needed.