Seeking Volunteer Editor to Look at Some Scenes

[totallyfigures]

I've written some scenes, some originally connected, some disconnected, as I've fleshed out the characters', well, characters in my head. I'd love to get some feedback about pacing, etc. before I really start trying to bring things together into a more coherent whole.

There isn't much super-explicit content (yet). It's a brother-sister incest story based on old 90s-era text-based RPG MUDs/MUSHes (if anyone remembers what those are). Please let me know if you'd be willing to take a look. Some sections are in rougher shape than others.

 

[AchtungNight]

Sorry I’m late. If you’re still in need please let me know. I am willing to help thx.