Seeking patience editor

[Arthur_J_Cummings]

This is my first time trying this form out or even seeking a volunteer for editing one of my stories and giving strong feed back on grammar issues. Mainly I would like someone to highlight the issues and explain why they are wrong and possible give advice on where I can learn the correct grammar rules.

Sadly,English is my native tongue but I have never been good at grammar and really need help.

Please pm me if you are interested.

P.S
This story I want read has gay, straight and bisexual scene in it and is set in the dark ages.