Seeking feedback on my bdsm story...

[CallieW]

Hi there, I am new to this and would love some constructive criticism.

The story is called It's Finally Saturday

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=455447. I put this here but I dont know how to make it a working link.

If any of you don't object to the BDSM genre and are open to giving me feedback, I'd greatly appreciate it. Thank you in advance. Callie

 

[Experiencedguy]

This is a nice erotic story, very good for a first effort. I did review it, rate it, and comment.

There were a few misspellings, extra words, but good flow.

I do want to see more.