Seeking editor for ch.2 of bondage machine story

vootvoot

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Hey all, my second chapter was sent back; the rejection notice mentioned that there was a spelling error. Confusingly enough, I couldn't find it with either spellcheck or a manual look-through! Help would be greatly appreciated.

If you want to check whether you're interested, the first chapter is here. It's a light-hearted story about lesbian domination, sci-fi bondage devices, and orgasm control.

Let me know if it sounds up your alley!
 
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