See a difference?

[Brightdawn]

Okay...I have a new stoy posted and I think that it shows how much I have grown as a writer....

Thoughts and comments would be welcome...

Summer time fun

 

[LADay]

Link to other stories

Do you have a link to earlier story?
I liked this one.
LADay

 

[Brightdawn]

My other stories

Thank you LADay...

 

[FallingToFly]

Brightdawn-

I RCV'ed your story. Hope it helps.

 

[Brightdawn]

Brightdawn-

I RCV'ed your story. Hope it helps.

Thanks FtF

I read your comment and do see your point. That is after all why I posted here, to get this kind of feed back. I did have a few people read over it, before I submitted it here on Lit, and none had the same comments as you. So once again, thank you.

 

[FallingToFly]

Thanks FtF

I read your comment and do see your point. That is after all why I posted here, to get this kind of feed back. I did have a few people read over it, before I submitted it here on Lit, and none had the same comments as you. So once again, thank you.

I'm glad it worked for you. I'm usually leery of giving criticism, even constructive criticism, because of past backlash. I hope you find the comment helpful, and, if you need someone to walk you through a story and help you edit/proof, feel free to hit me up through PM and we can see what I can do. My schedule is extremely hectic at times, but if I can work someone in, I will.