Second story posted-and critique required

[WanderingWillie]

Hi all,

So two stories in and now I decide I want to know peoples thoughts. This may sound stupid but I just re read it and feel that perhaps I have let myself down with some bad grammer. Let me know what you think.

Also I have chapter two ready but I really think I need an editor to sweep over it for me - any takers.

Here is the link to chapter one http://www.literotica.com/s/best-friends-mom-ch-01

 

[biziwen]

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