Second person point of view

[P. B. Walker]

Hi all,

I'm new to this board, and to Literotica as well. I would describe myself as a hobby writer, meaning I write erotic stories as a hobby and because I find them fun to write. Not to mention the fact that it gives me something to do with all the naughty thoughts that are continually popping into my brain. I do not have a writing background at all, so please excuse my ignorance.

Since coming to this site I have been reading all the available literature in the Writer's Resources section. I must say it is very good and I am learning a lot in a quick amount of time. One thing that is still not processing clearing in my brain is the different point of views. I believe I fully understand first person point of view and third person point of view. However, I'm kinda stuck on second person point of view. I was wondering if anyone could point me to a story here on Literotica that is written in the second person point of view. It doesn't have to be one that is ranked high. I'd just like to see an example of second person point of view in use.

I have sent a couple of my stories to the volunteer editors, so hopefully I will have a story or two posted here soon. Thanks in advance for any help you can provide.

- PBW

 

[Quiet_Cool]

A Beach Encounter by Courtesan
www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=797

A Bedtime Story by Wetnastychat
www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=10952

Here's two, but I haven't read them...just picked them at random from the Erotic Couplings section. Hope they help...

 

[KillerMuffin]

Second person, ouch. Don't do it.

"You walked into the room and smiled at me. I felt as if we were destined for this moment forever. You crossed over to me, touching my face. You leaned down, kissing me gently. I loved the way your big breasts swayed with the motion."

Feel into it yet? Or do you feel like rolling your eyes and finding something else?

First person is good.

"I liked the way he walked down the street, as if he didn't care what anyone thought of him. He shoved his hands in his jean pockets and sauntered against the flow of double breasted suits. The casualness of his attitude attraced me and I found myself following before I could think the better of it."

Third person is good, too.

"He threw the apple core off to the side and wiped his mouth. He'd been sitting on the picnic table, watching the diner's door for the last two hours. She'd finally gotten tired of hiding in it's depths and had stepped out into the sun. She was going to tell him the truth, whether she liked it or not."

Another thing to look for is tense. There are really only two viable tenses for writing anything, past and present. The preference is past because it's what most things are written in and presents a reader's comfort zone. Beyond that, past tense also makes more sense. Who is going to take the time to write anything down in the middle of watching or doing something? Present tense, however, if skillfully done, can be just as satisfying.

 

[P. B. Walker]

Thanks

Thank you KillerMuffin and Quiet_Cool.

Those two stories and the examples KillerMuffin gave cemented it in my mind. I appreciate ya'll taking the time to help. You'll get a laugh out of this; after thinking about it for a few minutes, this is the impression I got of writing in the second person, it's like having great sex with a person all afternoon and then going home, calling them on the phone and re-telling the entire afternoon's activities to them.

Anyhoo... I think I'll stick to 1st and 3rd person. Thanks again.

-PBW

 

[English-Passion]

Second-Person = Second-Rate

For what it is worth, I find stories written in second-person to be utterly unreadable.

As soon as I open one and see it starts telling me about what I did, I get the feeling that Alzheimers has finally taken hold.

They are to be avoided at all costs.

English-Passion

 

[Jake Marlow]

Amen, brother. If I open a 2nd person story I can't close it fast enough!

Jake