Saucy Jack

Jen24

Experienced
Joined
Apr 12, 2006
Posts
36
Saucy Jack - feedback request

My Halloween story has just been posted, and I'd be very grateful for any feedback you feel you can offer.

Saucy Jack

It is a fictionalised account of the Whitechapel Murders in 1888.

I started off writing a modern day piece about a woman who escapes from a psychotic killer who has been plying her with hallucinogenic drugs and she's not sure what is real, etc, etc - throw in a ghostly warning from his first victim (possibly his mother a la Hitchcock's Psycho) and there you would have had it. A slightly deranged ghost story. I had got some way through writing it before realising it was a bit shit.

I hit upon the idea of basing the killer upon Jack the Ripper, but I didn't know very much about him so did some research. Long story short: I wrote this story instead. Why, I figured, settle for some pale version of the Ripper, when I could have the terrifying original.

When I had finished it, I was in two minds as to whether to post it - I think it's pretty disturbing. I was much happier with Lizzie and Kitty in the Gazebo (in Journal II) than with Ginger and Nell on the streets of Spitalfields.

I'm still rather worried that I will be misinterpreted and cast as some sort of rape/murder fantasist, and that the whole thing is in very, very bad taste. I hope that it is clear that I do not condone, nor derive any erotic satisfaction from the murders themselves, which I have kept to the periphery. It was pretty clear to me from the off that Whitechapel is the main character of the story - Jack is just a facet, or, rather, a symptom of it.

Anyway I've blathered on too long. I would be very grateful if you guys would read it over and give me your honest opinion of it.

Thanks,

Jen

BTW - If the hallucinagenic drugs story catches anyone's imagination, then feel free to use it. I couldn't make it work, but perhaps a better writer could.
 
Last edited:
Back
Top