satirical/fantasy/erotic

[walkerlong]

My new story, just online. It's a combination of satire and fantasy with some sex thrown in for flavor. It is called "The Lesbian, The Bitch, and The Bathrobe." The plot centers on a lonely, young woman who stumbles upon a magical doorway to a mysterious land. It seems like an answer to her prayers, but there is trouble in the form of the obligatory Evil Queen.

I am pretty happy with the structure of the plot, but I think the piece could use some polish. I appreciate any insightful suggestions.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=336724

 

[tickledkitty]

There are a lot of typos. Other than that, I enjoyed it a great deal. I think you could have done a little more with the ending. Anyway, it was a fun read. Thanks!

 

[walkerlong]

There are a lot of typos. Other than that, I enjoyed it a great deal. I think you could have done a little more with the ending. Anyway, it was a fun read. Thanks!

The ending needed more, huh? See, I was worried that the story was a bit too long as it is...