Sappho's Grove

[Zamdrist]

My first submission has been accepted. Your thoughts on it would be very welcome. Thank you.

Sappho's Grove

This was my first and only poem, inspired upon learning of Sappho and the Greek isle of Lesbos. An odd topic for a male writer, but hell, that's just me.

Zamdrist

 

[KillerMuffin]

Zamdrist, the poetry "clique" doesn't exist. There isn't one. It is, however, a two way street. If you want to be a part of the poetry forum or to have people evaluate your poetry than start by evaluating someone else's instead of only asking for evaluation on your own poetry. The poetry forum is a very new one and it recently came from the shockingly selfish feedback board where the majority demand or request feedback, but never return the favor.

No, it's not a rule that you participate fully, but it is common courtesy. I responded here because it seemed far more appropriate than continuing in that "clique" thread at the General Board.

We see a lot of "flash in the pan" poets who request feedback, receive it, then never come back or returned the favor. We are leery about this with new feedback requests for the simple reason that a good, well thought out piece of feedback like we are accustomed to giving takes hours to come up with. Why should we waste that much time on people who won't be a part of our community?

Please, be a part of the community, we'd adore to have you. We love poetry and we love talking about it. We don't know you and we don't know what you expect from us beyond feedback or how you intend to become a part of us. You'll have to help us figure that out.

NOTE TO OTHER POETS: Please do not respond to the word "clique" in this thread spoken by either myself or Zamdarist. This is a GB carryover and you don't want to get into that can of worms.

 

[Zamdrist]

KillerMuffin:

You make good points and I'm properly humbled <no sarcasm>.

I will endeavour to study and enjoy the poetry here.

Thanks,

Zamdrist

 

[smithpeter]

Zamdrist

I taste a lot of erotic things in this. Your
Sappho's Grove

Within the clasp of parted lips
never was seen more swollen
bosom or heavier fruit hung from maiden or tree.

There is nothing strange about a man thinking, writing about two women, together in comfort and passion.
For a first poem it is mighty.
Perhaps a challenge is due to ask men and women poets to visit and taste images of two men in comfort and passion. It would be a risky endeavor, indeed.
sp

 

[Zamdrist]

Re: Zamdrist

I taste a lot of erotic things in this. Your
Sappho's Grove

Thanks for the feeback. It was the first poem I set out to seriously write, one that wasn't forced upon me by an english teacher.

I have to get into the Poetry Bootcamp threads and do some serious reading. In my naivety I believed it had to rhyme.

As far as feeling weird about obsessing over women-women sex - I dunno, I've found a home and place to be me here I think and that will help. So far I've been accepted and that makes me glad.

Thanks again.