Rookie Author - Feedback Wanted

[carolinahusband]

I just had my first-ever attempt at writing erotic fiction posted and I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it. I welcome feedback from both veteran and beginning authors as I hope to continue the series on a regular basis. I would especially appreciate hearing from the female writers as to my overall writing style and descriptions and your reaction to the story.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=282800

Thanks in advance for your comments!

 

[slyc_willie]

I like your style of writing and your grasp of dialogue. My only complaint would be that some of the paragraphs (especially those involving sex) are a bit long and hard to follow.

Still, I gave it a 5. Well done.

 

[carolinahusband]

Intimate Neighbors

Just an update to my previous post. My first-ever story on Literotica is titled Intimate Neighbors. It details the initial encounter of a recently-seperated wife and her college-grad neighbor.

I would appreciate any and all feedback as I look to continue the story. I would particularly like to hear from the female readers.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=282800