Rising Storm feedback, part 2 . . .

[thicktimber]

I was overwhelmed by the generous, focused criticism of my story, Rising Storm. I got busy, trying to develop character more, trying to engage readers on levels other than merely sexual (though this initial foray is still mostly sexual). To make a long story short, I'd welcome any criticism of this revised version.

You guys were awesome before, blunt but nevertheless encouraging, the best sort of criticism, and I truly appreciate it. This is, in some ways, a really different story.

Thanks in advance to any readers who are gluttons for punishment!

 

[thicktimber]

Sorry . . I forgot to mention that it is formally listed as I. Rising Storm in erotic couplings at this link.

 

[thicktimber]

I have found a few errors that resulted from tangled fingers on the keyboard; I thought I had caught all of them. Must be my ADHD! Thank you in advance for any additional feedback or any first-time feedback. I've been impressed with the camaraderie here.