Ripples On A Pond Sequel

[AsylumSeeker]

Thanks to your positive feedback I'm starting to write a sequel to Ripples On A Pond (AsylumSeeker, incest/taboo). Since I've been criticized about not doing a good job at ending some stories, I want to ask readers who enjoyed the first to let me know what you think of the following story outline. Please, if you think it can be improved or should be modified, feel free to share your thoughts. Thanks!!!

I reveal that Butch can be physically abusive as his father was. He's in love with his sister Tina and it turns out he's controlling and jealous of her tryst with his best friend Kevin. This leads to a dramatic and emotional battle between them.

Kevin's relationship with his sister Carrie continues to blossom, and he shares his erotic writings with her. Things get steamy.

Tina continues to fantasize about a tryst with Kevin's sister. A few weeks later Butch and his sister Tina visit with Kevin and his sister Carrie for another pond-side party. Tina and Carrie have a tryst. Butch's jealousy of Kevin continues to build. Butch feels he should be able to have Carrie sexually since Kevin had been with Tina.

Butch forces himself on Carrie. Kevin is forced to decide between his best friend and sister. Kevin comes to Carrie's defense. After the resulting altercation Butch loses the friendship of everyone, but after several days he and Kevin make amends. But Tina decides she can't be with her possessive brother sexually any more since he can't handle their casual relationship.

Your feedback is appreciated!!!

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Sigh

I'm guessing those who read the stories don't frequent the boards, or are in complete agreement with my proposed outline (yeah, that'll happen). Lesson learned.

Laurel, feel free to delete this thread.

 

[kbate]

Post links to your other story, I'll give it a read and try to answer your questions, although I can tell you now my answers will not be that which you seek.


Ripples on a Pond

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Embarrassed...

Don't know how to post links. I know this is extremely limiting, but what can I say? I have seen links posted, which seem to be a confusing and non-sensical series of alpha-numerics to my eye.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Asked for help

I posted a thread on How To... so hopefully I can post a link in the near future. Thanks for your reply.

 

[kbate]

Since I've been criticized about not doing a good job at ending some stories, I want to ask readers who enjoyed the first to let me know what you think of the following story outline.

I just finished reading Ripples. First, it is a wonderful story, the characters are alive and the writing is rather refreshing compared to much of what I read (including my own) on this site.

Your outline for the second installment seems quite well thought out and should work without difficulty.

A challenge: Chapter 2 should contain Kevin's story for Carrie in text form. (His writing style should differ from yours, giving him separation from you and a life and style of his own.)
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As far as endings, I generally ignore the reader's desire for cloture. This story has potential for surviving many installments, and premature cloture would be tragic. My own silly little incest/taboo story received the same requests for "more" and "what happened next, were they caught?" comments that yours apparently has garnered; I ignored them, but still wrote another few thousand words that someday may be added or posted as chapter 2.

kb

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Thanks kb!

Thanks for the feedback. The second installment will contain Kevin's erotic story for Carrie, but I haven't figured out all the details. And yes, seeing as how he's just a high school graduate and never really applied himself in school, garnering grades just high enough to graduate, his story will have to appear different than my writing. That's also what I did when Carrie found a story fragment imprinted on the last page of the tablet in the first Ripples, I tried to make his style quite a bit different than mine (more immature and less refined).