Requesting feedback

[BellaBestia]

hi
am fairly new to the site and very new to this forum. i'd like to ask all you seasoned literotica writers to help me develop my writing with some constructive criticism of what I have submitted so far.

muchly appreciated!
BellaBestia

http://english.literotica.com:81/st...&author=bellabestia&Submit=Search+The+Stories

 

[pantyhose fun]

So... lots of veiws - but NO comments??

Not quite enough "kink" for you??

 

[oOScarletWingsOo]

Comments Added

I put in my 2 cents. Hope my comments are helpful in some way, because I don't really like to read something in EDIT MODE, because that distracts me from giving an overall impression, which is what I like to do. If you need for me to EDIT what I've commented on PM me.

 

[BellaBestia]

Thanks to all who have given me feedback here and privately.
I think a good writer is one who is contantly learning thier craft.
So please keep educating me.

cheers!
bb