rejection

[killallhippies]

since i can find any new editors i was curious if anyone knew of a way to find out exactly why a story was rejected besides that crappy checklist they give you? please tell me. i want my story to make a home here, damnit.

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

I'll look it over if you want. You can pm me if you wish.

 

[killallhippies]

I'll look it over if you want. You can pm me if you wish.

not necesary. here's a link to essentially the same version i submitted to lit.

 

[Boxlicker101]

not necesary. here's a link to essentially the same version i submitted to lit.

I clicked on the link and got the message "The page cannot be displayed".

 

[MLyons]

Here's a link that works:

Killallhippies' Story

 

[killallhippies]

I clicked on the link and got the message "The page cannot be displayed".

try it now. there was an extra http in there. i edited it out.

 

[killallhippies]

Here's a link that works:

Killallhippies' Story

ahh, thanks.

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

I only saw three phrases that might have had something to do with the rejection.

You used "young age" twice... and then something about "classmates for years to come." Both of these point towards the two girls being underage.


If you really want to be sure it doesn't get rejected, you might want to add in somewhere that they are freshmen in college or they are 18 or something of that nature.

 

[Boxlicker101]

ahh, thanks.

I looked it over, not really reading carefully, and it was obvius to me that you are writing about two girls in their early teen., just going through puberty. These paragraphs would establish that:

She was short and would probably always be, but her body was
already showing the signs of smooth, gentle curves that would
make her the envy of her classmates for years to come. Her
breasts were small, but well shaped. At her age she was already
finding herself turning down guys almost twice her age. Not that
she had a problem saying no. She reveled in the attention, but,
frankly, she just had no interest in the attentions of the
opposite sex regardless of age.

Cindy, on the other hand, always wore clothes that seemed to be
handed down from her two older brothers and her sister, because
the vast majority of them were. They all had that well worn
quality about them. Often they even had holes or permanent
stains. Her hair was black as the night and went seemingly
wherever it pleased without appearing to be too messy or nappy.
Her skin had the light brown tone she'd inherited from her
father's side of the family and her eyes deep brown from the same
side.

Her body was a little more firmly planted on the side of
womanhood than her slightly younger friend. Her breasts were a
little larger, her butt a little fuller and her hips a bit more
pronounced. She was the envy of all the young girls from the
trailer park where she lived and spent most of her free time
avoiding. Cindy had no problem admitting her hatred of her roots.
The only thing her parents were good for was easily stolen money
and booze. Even at her young age Cindy was more than acquainted to the joys of alcohol among other things.

Besides this specific part, the whole relationship between mother and daughterr makes it obvious that this is an underage girl. The rules are very definite: No sex involving anybody under 18 years old, and that is a rule that appears to be broken. Although I didn't see an age given, it is obvious that at least one of these girls are underage.

To make it acceptable, make a reference to their ages by saying something about recently celebrating their 18 birthdays or looking forward to voting or some other reference. Change the descriptions from "girls" to "young women" or other term. As for the paragraphs I singled ut, either delete them or say something like "ever since going through puberty almost seven years age" or words to that effect.

There were also some typos and misspellings and they can be corrected

 

[killallhippies]

thank you. good points. the story has been viewed four times today, so i don't know what's going on there. i think i'll carefully edit those paragraphs and resubmit.

 

[killallhippies]

and they were originally written as around fifteen.

 

[killallhippies]

holy shit. i just noticed i mentioned that one girl was fifteen. DUH! god, i'm fucking stupid.

 

[killallhippies]

i sent in the wrong fucking version.

 

[lilith1979]

thank you. good points. the story has been viewed four times today, so i don't know what's going on there. i think i'll carefully edit those paragraphs and resubmit.

A story will be viewed many times before it is accepted. I currently have on in my que that has 16 views!!!!!! I just wish they'd approve it already, it's been 2 weeks!

 

[killallhippies]

A story will be viewed many times before it is accepted. I currently have on in my que that has 16 views!!!!!! I just wish they'd approve it already, it's been 2 weeks!

not necesarily, but i do realize it's a possibility. it took one read to reject it. of course, when the story mentions that one of the characters is 15 i guess that's an easy choice.

i still don't know how i sent them the unedited version.

 

[lilith1979]

not necesarily, but i do realize it's a possibility. it took one read to reject it. of course, when the story mentions that one of the characters is 15 i guess that's an easy choice.

i still don't know how i sent them the unedited version.

If you didn't C&P it's an easy mistake. Especially if you do things like I do. I had a story get rejected for snuff. So, when I saved the edited version, I only made a minor change of the file name. It went from TheNightmare1 to TheNightmare1a. It's an easy thing to overlook that small of a change when submitting, did you do that perhaps?

 

[killallhippies]

If you didn't C&P it's an easy mistake. Especially if you do things like I do. I had a story get rejected for snuff. So, when I saved the edited version, I only made a minor change of the file name. It went from TheNightmare1 to TheNightmare1a. It's an easy thing to overlook that small of a change when submitting, did you do that perhaps?

that's what makes it bad. i did c&p.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

A story will be viewed many times before it is accepted. I currently have on in my que that has 16 views!!!!!! I just wish they'd approve it already, it's been 2 weeks!

Each time you look at it also counts as a view as well as moving it to the back of the que.

-Colly

 

[killallhippies]

Each time you look at it also counts as a view as well as moving it to the back of the que.

-Colly

which is why i won't look until i get an answer and why i didn't catch my mistake. i understand that rule and i don't. i wish there was a way you could check your story for errors without bumping it to the bottom.

 

[lilith1979]

Each time you look at it also counts as a view as well as moving it to the back of the que.

-Colly

All I'm doing is viewing submissions, I'm not clicking on the pending thingy. It's remained at 16 for 3 days now, so I know it's not me. I know better, now, than to click that pending thingy!!!

 

[carsonshepherd]

which is why i won't look until i get an answer and why i didn't catch my mistake. i understand that rule and i don't. i wish there was a way you could check your story for errors without bumping it to the bottom.

Where there's a Will, there's a way.

When you go through the submission process, there are two buttons: Submit Now and Preview Submission. The Preview button will give you what amounts to a "thumbnail" of your entire submission.

THIS is where you go over it with a fine tooth comb. If you see anything, you can Delete and Makes Changes. Until you hit Submit you aren't in the queue and you're free to change anything about your story without going to the bottom.

Don't skip this step. As killallhippies and a couple of others learned... sometimes you submit the wrong version of a story or put in something that was meant for your eyes only.