rejected many times

[dannyboy1958]

Ive written a story that I've tried to submit to Lit many times but it keeps getting rejected. Ive made changes still rejected. Im not the greatest with grammer, but i do write a good story, i think.
ive asked for help via the other methods but no ones come back to me.
any kind soul care to have read and help, happy to share the royalties when it becomes a moivie

PM me....

 

[NotWise]

Ive written a story that I've tried to submit to Lit many times but it keeps getting rejected. Ive made changes still rejected. Im not the greatest with grammer, but i do write a good story, i think.
ive asked for help via the other methods but no ones come back to me.
any kind soul care to have read and help, happy to share the royalties when it becomes a moivie

PM me....

When you ask for a reader, it's a good idea to include the story's category, the length of the story, and something about the content. In this case, you might also want to tell us why it's been rejected.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

OK, following said in a hopefully-helping manner, with no intent to insult.

Getting a response would be more likely if you gave some idea of what sort of story it is and how long it is. Many people here tend to stick to just some themes.

Secondly, while I am no grammar-Nazi, I have to respectfully point out that there are nearly a dozen spelling and grammatical errors in your short note. OK, maybe you were just being casual, I get it and many people are. That said, it stands out and suggests that anybody trying to help might find themselves stuck with endless corrections. Some of us are more easygoing than others when it comes to such, but proper spelling and grammar is central to success here and, sorry, but many people here are going to see it as a flag.

I would suggest you start over and wish you, sincerely, good luck.

 

[oggbashan]

You could try downloading the free version of Grammarly.

 

[gunhilltrain]

You could try downloading the free version of Grammarly.

I got rejected by another site because of grammar. I had already published several stories there, but that time I was careless and I had more than a few grammatical errors. They practically ordered me to get Grammarly, which I did.

Grammarly is a program, not a human editor, so it needs interpretation on some of what it suggests. Perhaps try it once and see if you are still rejected.

I'm guessing from the errors in your note that you may indeed need a human editor and that you should look for one here. I'm not familiar with the process; you'd have to check the Literotica guidelines about how it is done.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

Well... why the fuck was it rejected? How long is it? Is it under 750 word, it'll be rejected nomatter how perfect it is. She's not a super stickler for grammar, but it has to be somewhat easy to follow. Is it one long paragraph, are you omitting chapter two? Is it as bland and uninformative as this thread? Is there under(18)age elements or rape, no happy ending, snuff story, real animal fucking?

 

[gordo12]

Ive written a story that I've tried to submit to Lit many times but it keeps getting rejected. Ive made changes still rejected. Im not the greatest with grammer, but i do write a good story, i think.
ive asked for help via the other methods but no ones come back to me.
any kind soul care to have read and help, happy to share the royalties when it becomes a moivie

PM me....

I ran your request through Grammarly. It showed thirteen errors out of 75 words. That's close to a 20%, 1 in every 5 words error rate. Overall, you scored 57 out of 100. A good writer will score in the high '80's to the '90s before editing.

Anyone taking your story on would be looking at a total rewrite. I can write my own story far faster than rewriting yours.

Seriously, go get the free version of Grammarly. Plug your story in. All those red lines under words etc are mistakes, and if you're going to write, you need to understand WHY they're mistakes. That's why Laurel is rejecting your story.

 

[gunhilltrain]

I ran your request through Grammarly. It showed thirteen errors out of 75 words. That's close to a 20%, 1 in every 5 words error rate. Overall, you scored 57 out of 100. A good writer will score in the high '80's to the '90s before editing.

Anyone taking your story on would be looking at a total rewrite. I can write my own story far faster than rewriting yours.

Seriously, go get the free version of Grammarly. Plug your story in. All those red lines under words etc are mistakes, and if you're going to write, you need to understand WHY they're mistakes. That's why Laurel is rejecting your story.

As I mentioned, some things suggested by Grammarly are judgment calls. It doesn't like certain stylistic issues like redundant words and phrases, which usually show up in blue rather than red. You have to make your own call on those. Sometimes it will say that "brown stone" (the material) should be "brownstone" (the type of building).

You might want to save the Grammarly version as a separate file with Grammarly in the title. That way you will know that you have run it through (it's easy to forget sometimes). Grammarly itself will automatically save its own version without any prompting. Keep those around too.

 

[gordo12]

As I mentioned, some things suggested by Grammarly are judgment calls. It doesn't like certain stylistic issues like redundant words and phrases, which usually show up in blue rather than red. You have to make your own call on those. Sometimes it will say that "brown stone" (the material) should be "brownstone" (the type of building).

You might want to save the Grammarly version as a separate file with Grammarly in the title. That way you will know that you have run it through (it's easy to forget sometimes). Grammarly itself will automatically save its own version without any prompting. Keep those around too.

I have the full version, so things like missing apostrophes and small i's in place of I show up. Those aren't suggestions. It does make suggestions, but nothing I wrote about his post above fell in that category.

You can edit and it saves it in the app. When you download the final result you get something like "Title.edited.doc." That leaves you with the original and the new file. Nothing gets lost.

 

[MetaBob]

I have the full version, so things like missing apostrophes and small i's in place of I show up. Those aren't suggestions. It does make suggestions, but nothing I wrote about his post above fell in that category.

You can edit and it saves it in the app. When you download the final result you get something like "Title.edited.doc." That leaves you with the original and the new file. Nothing gets lost.

FWIW, in my experience 90-95% of what Grammarly (free web version) flags for me is BS. It's an AI, and as yet AIs are stupid. Examples from the first half of a piece I've been writing for the past couple months: Overall score: 90, 87 alerts (81 after I fixed the things it found), Clarity: Very clear, Engagement: Very engaging, Delivery: Just right

"I graduated from the college last year." Nope, "the" is not a problem in a town where there's only one college and both people go (or went) there.

"which felt really nice once we got going"
...
"That was really fun." Grammarly doesn't like adverbs. Neither do I, particularly, but in dialog I'm OK with a few.

"coach would let me race for the team at a dual meet. I even won a couple times. Glory Days, right? I still run, but honestly I prefer hiking."
...
"I saw a few games a couple years ago"
No, Grammarly, not "a coach" or "the coach", though come to think of it, should "coach" be capitalized in this situation where it's not the first word in a sentence? And no, not "couple of", and is the "honestly" adverb really worth flagging?

"frosh don't get many chances to play" No, Grammarly, "don't" doesn't need to be changed to "doesn't." Dumbass AI.

It goes on. I'll skim the rest of the 87 alerts (in about 10K words) in case something turns out to be worthwhile.

"your orgasms are mine now" No, Grammarly, "mine" does not need to be changed to "mines".

"Don't be long; I don't like waiting" No, Grammarly, "be long" does not need to be changed to "belong". LOL

"I dont know"
"I has having trouble"
"ashwaganda" -> "ashwagandha"
"man-splaining" -> "mansplaining"
Yes Grammarly, you caught three for real, and I'll go with you on #4. Thank you, sincerely.

"she was about to cry as I handled her the three containers" Weird. I misspelled "handed" but Grammarly flagged something else.

Mostly what it catches for me are a few doubled or missing words, and the rare misspelling of a long, esoteric word: I recall that "ophthalmologist" got flagged when I spelled it wrong. Thanks, Grammarly, for that and a handful of other things.

In this half of half a piece, I fixed 5 things of the 87 that Grammarly flagged. I'm grateful for all five, and can easily dismiss the rest. Whether or not I end up capitalizing "coach" is still TBD, but at least I'm conscious of it now.

All that said, if your stories are getting rejected for basic grammatical errors, by all means use whatever tools you can, including Grammarly, which is vastly better than MS Word for this, before burdening an editor with something that needs big-time help. You don't need an editor yet, you first need a proofreader. I use the free web-browser version. I gave them an e-address and they send me a note telling me how I'm doing once a month.

 

[gunhilltrain]

dannyboy1958: I am curious. How many times has this story (you're talking about only one, correct?) been rejected? Usually (this is only a guess) it's no more than twice. You must have read the various favorites you've collected in the last ten years. What are they doing right?

 

[Zeb_Carter]

Ive written a story that I've tried to submit to Lit many times but it keeps getting rejected. Ive made changes still rejected. Im not the greatest with grammer, but i do write a good story, i think.
ive asked for help via the other methods but no ones come back to me.
any kind soul care to have read and help, happy to share the royalties when it becomes a moivie

PM me....

If you wrote your story like you wrote this post, I can see why it was rejected.

Try using apostrophes where the words call for them, try to capitalize those words that call for them. Ive should be I've. and i the proper noun should be I. And Movie only has one i in it. And grammar is spelled with two a's.

There's my two cents as that's about what it's worth in todays market.