Red Hot Story - feedback please

[gagamelv]

Please let me know what you think of my first story - "Red Hot and Office Blue" - it was all started by me fantasising about an internet amatuer.
I don't know how to link this post to the story - but please find it and get back to me.

Cheers

Gagamelv

 

[Debbie]

Here's a link to your bio

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=49518

 

[Guest]

I enjoyed it!

Just wanted to be amongst the first to let you know I actually did enjoy your story.

(Yes...it had a few minor errors, but with practice and perhaps some initial review help, you'll easily correct most of these.)

But I did want to say was that I particularly enjoyed the fact that I very quickly got into the "dialogue". Knowing you are from the UK perhaps helped. But I began reading..."hearing" the differences in the exchanges of conversation, knowing full well that the subtle differences of our languages "are" there, but made it more personal and interesting for me to read and enjoy.

The images were good, descriptions long enough and erotic enough to be very enjoyable.


Thanks again for the entertainment....especially at this particular time!

To sleep........perchance to dream - William Shakespear

I remain.........

 

[lilminx]

I thought your story was pretty good- I have to admit that I did skip over a lot of the beginning and went straight to the sex part- I'm just a perv, I guess Please don't take offense at that- I'm just a person who likes to get right down to things.

 

[JRob]

New story

Hey, nice job, especially for the first time out. It can be tough spending time writing something and then wondering what people think about it. But it was a decent story! Keep it up. JR

 

[gagamelv]

cheers for the feedback - will be back with another story soon - a(and thanks debbie for the link!)

 

[Debbie]

You are very welcome!