Reason For Rejection

[Guest]

A STORY THAT I HAD SUBIMITTED WAS REJECTED WITH THE FOLLOWING REASON GIVEN..( DID YOUR STORY CONTAIN DESCRIPTIONS OF BESTIALITY WHICH IS NOT ACCEPTED IN THIS SITE) First of all the story is posted below and naturally contained not a hint of Beastiality. Second the number of persons that were supposed to have reviewed the story was listed as (6) SIX. I am troubled that this many editors do not have the ability to read something. The story was posted for Loving Wives and had the title walking the dog( which is an approitate title for those that bother to read without rejecting something out of hand without the bother to read it. The description of the story stated : Husband Discovers that Pet is Wife's Best Friend....Now
what is wrong with that description? I have the urge to say the word (Idiots) BUT i WILL NOT...STILL i AM STRONGLY THINKING IT..


TEXT OF STORY.

" You can stay where you are and watch television honey," my wife said "I'm just going
to take Skip for a walk."

I looked around but Kim was already out the door. To be honest I didn't question her
recent interest about taking the dog for a walk. Could it be that she was feeling guilty
about her previous omissions. I settled back to watch the movie and when the commercial
came on I got up to take a piss. As I stood there I happened to notice something blue
behind the clothes hamper. I bent to pick it up and saw that it was the panties that she
had taken from her drawer that morning. It seemed odd that she would put on a new pair just
to take skip out for a walk. I plainly remembered her taking the blue pair out of the neat
stack. I felt the crotch. It was still damp. That meant this was the pair she had worn today.
On a hunch I checked her drawer and there was the pink pair on top just as I had noticed
that morning as I closed the drawer for her since she rushed out to work without closing
it.

I sat back down to continue my movie but something nagged at me. Kim had to be taking
the dog for a walk with no panties on under her short skirt. The more I thought about the
more curious I became. Finally I knew that I had to check it out just so I would not keep
wondering about it. I headed for the park about two blocks away. I figured she had about
a fifteen minute head start on me. I walked fast. Once in the park I took the path I usually
had before when I had to take skip out. I rounded a curve in the walkway that allowed me
to look several hundred yards ahead. Knowing that Skip liked to sniff every bush and tree
along the way I surmised that if she had taken this path I would see her ahead. That meant
that she had taken the cutoff path that went to where the stone picnic tables were.

I usually avoided this one since before I had tumbled across some young couple doing the
dirty at one of the tables. I had not wanted to disturb someone as i had once before. Let
them fuck in peace was my motto. I cut across the grass and through a stand of bushes
and trees and in a few minutes I saw the first of the picnic tables. Then i saw the patch of
white that was skip. Well actually skip was black and white but only the white showed up
in the dim light of the street lamps. What the hell. Skip was tied to a picnic table on his
long leash and he was gaily sniffing to his hearts content. I made sure Skip wouldn't see
me and I was downwind from him. I looked for Kim at the table but there was no one there.

Now I was really curious. I wasn't worried about Kim. I had bought her the most powerful
pepper spray possible. It would shoot a stream over ten feel and she could spray a
regiment of would be mashers with it if she had to. Then movement at the next table about
twenty five yards away caught my eye. It was a flash of white. I moved toward the table,
keeping in the shadow and close to some bushes. I could hear, softly, a male voice.
Then I cocked my ear and heard smacking sounds like something wet being hit by something
wet also. I could also hear moaning. Female moaning. Kim. Was she being raped. I could
make out at least three figures besides Kim's. One was behind her. Her skirt was evidently
pushed up as I clearly could make out her white ass cheeks and the whiteness of one of
the male figures as it sawed back and forth.

Understanding came slow but at the same time fast. Kim was being fucked. I moved as close as
I dared. If my wife was being raped it was by at least three men. I took my cell from my pocket
and was about to dial 911 when i heard the male voice more clearly. "Oh yes that's right baby
just keep sucking my cock and I'll give you something to drink like always." As always the man
who i now saw was sitting with his feet on the table. My wife's head was in his lap and it bobbed
up and down. She was sucking the guy's cock while another one was fucking her from behind.
About that time the man fucking her began to grunt and then held himself against her ass. He
had just cum in her. He moved aside and the second man took his place. I could make out his
white cock in the light of the street light on the path as he hefted it and drove it in her. I could
swear that Kim reached her butt back to help him. She was definitely not being raped.

With the awareness that she had to be a willing participant to this I also had the awareness
that my cock was making a stiff tent in my pants. I took it out and held it. My eyes had
adjusted to the light more and now I could make out the cock in her mouth. From the way she
lifted her head high before coming back down I surmised that it was a very long cock. I had
began to whack my cock quietly as she was fucked and she was sucking the sitting man.
I heard he moan as she held her head down on the man's cock. She was deep throating him.

Now our own sex was rather mild and she certainly never sucked me more than a couple of minutes
when we screwed. Here she had been sucking the long cock of the man for at least ten minutes
that i had watched and probably some time before I arrived. Then as i was about to cum myself the
man behind her did as the first had done. When he moved away I saw another one step from the shadows
of the overhang and join the other two. The three than walked away without a word. Not a one of them said
a word to Kim and she never turned to see who they were. I was shaking the jism from my cock when I
heard the man say "Alright love here it comes." He made some sounds and Kim choked some and then
I saw her began to lick the cock off. She appeared to be stroking it. Getting the dredges of his orgasm
I guessed. Then he too slid off the table and got behind her ass. He knelt down and his face disappeared
in her butt. There was some sucking sounds for a few minutes and then he said "I think that got most of
it love."

Kim began to straighten herself up and then she spoke "You can have more here tomorrow night," she
said "I love lots of cocks." Was this my prim wife talking. This was not the Kim I knew. The man kissed
her then drifted off in the shadow of the path. I was about to confront her but thought better. I saw her
head toward Skip and I left as quietly as possible. I took off through the trees and stayed off the path.
I came out less than a block away from our house. I beat her home by five minutes. I was as I had been
when she left. I pretended to have fallen asleep. She let Skip off the leash and said " I think I'll have
a shower before bed and then disappeared into another part of the house.

I had a lot of time to mull over what I had seen. I was as curious about my own actions as I was my wife's.
The woman i had seen in the park was not the same woman I was married to. Of course I was not the kind to
jack off while I watched her fuck either. I waited till the next night and as soon as she left for Skip's
walk I was right begin her. In my pocket was a small but powerful pair of binoculars. I kept her in sight
as she walked up the path toward the picnic tables. She tied skip to the same one she had the night before.
I saw her approach the same man I had seen before and to my astonishment they kissed. She molded her body
to his for a good five minutes. Then I saw movement as several men materialized from the shadow. They
held back as my wife and her lover kissed hotly then he led her to the same table as before.

He dropped his pants and I got out my binoculars . I focused them and I had been right about the size
of the man's cock. It was large. "Oh it's real big tonight," I heard Kim say "Please...fuck me with it
tonight."

"No Kim you only get to suck this one...but it looks like you have about seven to fuck you tonight" the
man said. By now the men had taken out their cocks and I focused my glasses on them. I even recognized a
couple of them. Well let me say that I had seen them before in the neighborhood. Our neighborhood. It was
a sprawling walled in community with this park at it's center. I had to assume that all the men lived there
also. It's sort of hard to just drive in past the guards at the entrance. The man had taken his place on
the picnic table and Kim started to take his cock in her mouth when he stopped her "I think tonight you should
be completely naked. Kim hesitated for a minute then pulled her slipover off past her head. A quick unzip
and she whisked her skirt off past her feet. She did look a little uncomfortable naked in the open for
she did look around. When she saw the men they turned their faces quickly away. I understood then that they
wanted to be anonymous. Kim swallowed the man's cock and jutted her ass out for the first man to step up
and put his cock in her cunt.

With the glasses my wife and her fuckers were brought close to me. I could make out her lips compressing
around the fat shaft. I will admit that I got instantly hard at seeing my wife act like a plain
slut. I began to jack it just as the man behind her rammed his cock in her. I saw her mouth
open slightly around the cock in her mouth in pleasure. He began to slam hard into her and
the man she was sucking encouraged him own "Go man, he said "Fuck the slut with all you have
she needs real fucking tonight." As if in answer to the man her fucker started to fuck her
with a renewed passion. The man jerked her face from his cock "Do you like being fucked like
that Kim you whore," he snarled "do you like his cock?"

"Oh yes I love it," she cried out "Make him keep fucking me." The last wasn't necessary. As
soon as he had ejaculated in her there was another to take his place. This time she screamed
around the man's cock "Oh my God yes," she said "His cock is in my ass." At hearing this I
came all over the ground. Fucking Kim in the ass was something I had always wanted to do
but the one thing she would not allow me to. I made up my mind then. I put the glasses away
and, with my cock in mt hand, walked over to the group. I kept to her rear so she would not
see me. Now I was looking over another man's shoulder at the cock fucking her ass. He was pretty
much the same size as me but Kim seemed to be taking it pretty well. I knew then that I would
finally get to fuck Kim in her ass.

I had to wait while two more men fucked her cunt before I had my chance. I stepped up behind her
and fitted my cock to her dripping anus. I started to be easy but as my cock head touched her
crinkly hole I lost control and rammed it in to the hilt. This made her scream around the man's
cock. "Oh yes...that's good," he said "Fuck her good...it's making her suck me so good." Knowing
that she was sucking the cock so good I fucked her ass hard. I managed to look around to see
her face all the way down on his cock. Her mouth was in the man's pubic hair as she deep throated
him. I wished it was my cock she was sucking so deliciously. She had rarely put more than my
cock head in between those sweet lips.

I would love to say that I fucked her ass for a long time but truth be was that I came in
just a few minutes I was so excited that my cock had finally found itself in Kim's ass. I
was pushed aside as another horny man took my place and used her cunt. "You know," the man
standing beside me stroking a large cock said "The best thing that ever happened to me was
three months ago when I came up on her sucking her man's cock."

"Did you fuck her then" I asked?

"Well hell yes," he said "Her husband, I guess, told me to fuck her and I have fucked her
about three times a week since then." The sound of the cock slapping into Kim and the noise
she mad slurping away at his cock was loud in the night. "Damn I wish my own wife was this
slutty," the man said "I would really love to see her get fucked good like this." I knew how
he felt. I was truly loving seeing Kim be screwed so thoroughly by all these men. About that
time four more men walked up. According to my count Kim would have at least a dozen cocks in
her that night. The man who I had been talking with told me that he better fuck her before she
got too loose and stepped up to her well used dripping cunt. I watched as he put his large cock
head to her and pushed it in. He was larger than the ones so far and his cock squished cum
from her cunt when he speared her. I tried to be casual as the new men took their cocks out. I
wanted to see what kind of cocks were going to fuck my wife but didn't want to seem like I
was interested in them for myself.

The man finished fucking Kim and as soon as he pulled out I had my cock ready and pushed into
her gooey cunt before the other men had a chance. It was like a wet warm cunt filled with
mush that I went into. It felt great. I knew then that I would be one of her regulars every
night she went to walk Skip. I hung back as all the men fucked her and watched intently as
the man she was sucking filled her mouth. I saw his cum run down his long shaft and she
quickly scooped it into her mouth. When the last man drained himself in her I saw the man get
behind her and suck her cunt dry. I knew that I would have to find a way to do that also. It
was two nights later as I stood back and just before he had a chance to suck her cunt I
yelled "Hey I saw a cop car's lights." The man quickly ran off and Kim hurried to take skip
away. I knew that sperm was running down her legs. She hurried off.

I was waiting for when she started to the bathroom. I pulled Kim to me and kissed her before
she could resist. I tasted cum in her mouth. I soon had her on the couch and sucking the cum
that had survived the walk back. Kim looked frightened but I acted as if nothing was out of the
ordinary. I didn't try that again but something else happened. Skip was an old dog and one
morning we woke to find that he had went to happy dog land in the night. I felt that Kim's
sorrow was more motivated by not having him to take on her walks. Being the good husband I was
I had a present for Kim when she came home for work that night. I never have seen a woman so
happy at getting a new dog as a present. She gave him his first walk that night.




Now that you have read it I am not looking for your gramatical comments but just for discussion on the reason given for the rejection.

 

[HawaiiBill]

I don't know!

This may not be the best place to ask your question but it deserves an answer. I'll toss a suggestion to some folks to look into it.

It is clear that a lot of stories are posted in Literotica that haven't been given even a quick read by any editorial eye. Those are issues of just plain readability, not questions of bestiality or other taboos.

I've been a volunteer editor for several months. It's a separate group, apparently, from those who are reading stories submitted for acceptance. We get requests from writers who want editing and select us from the list of volunteers on the site. We get an e-mail from Literotica with the writer's e-mail address and instructions to contact them directly. That part works fine.

I have been concerned about the quality of writing in Literotica, the main reason I volunteered to help in a small way on what few stories come my way. It isn't that all stories should be prize-winners, in my view. Not at all. The sheer volume is instructive in its variety but it would be foolish to not think there should be some way to improve the quality of writing without impinging on the variety of sexual fantasy and experience presented.

Your story is not a subject that appeals to me but it is well-written and I would have said to post it.

 

[HawaiiBill]

I don't know!

This may not be the best place to ask your question but it deserves an answer. I'll toss a suggestion to some folks to look into it.

It is clear that a lot of stories are posted in Literotica that haven't been given even a quick read by any editorial eye. Those are issues of just plain readability, not questions of bestiality or other taboos.

I've been a volunteer editor for several months. It's a separate group, apparently, from those who are reading stories submitted for acceptance. We get requests from writers who want editing and select us from the list of volunteers on the site. We get an e-mail from Literotica with the writer's e-mail address and instructions to contact them directly. That part works fine.

I have been concerned about the quality of writing in Literotica, the main reason I volunteered to help in a small way on what few stories come my way. It isn't that all stories should be prize-winners, in my view. Not at all. The sheer volume is instructive in its variety but it would be foolish to not think there should be some way to improve the quality of writing without impinging on the variety of sexual fantasy and experience presented.

Your story is not a subject that appeals to me but it is well-written and I would have said to post it.

 

[Weird Harold]

First of all the story is posted below and naturally contained not a hint of Beastiality. Second the number of persons that were supposed to have reviewed the story was listed as (6) SIX.

I'd recommend resubmitting with a different description and a note in the comments field that the Story does NOT contain bestiality.

With the title, blurb, and the first third of the story as they are, I certainly would expect some bestiality. If I had fifty plus stories to approve each day, I doubt that I would have read much more than the first part of the story where it looks like she's doing the nasty with the dog instead of using him as an excuse tomeet strangers.

FWIW, the number of views does NOT indicate the number of editors who have reviewed the story -- there is only ONE editor who approves stories.

The number of views on your story before posting includes the number of times YOU looked at it as well as the number of times Laurel looked at it.

 

[snooper]

Re: Re: Reason For Rejection

... there is only ONE editor who approves stories...

I know we have discussed this before, but I still think that 50 stories, 365 days a year at 3k words per story at 400 words per minute comes to a working year of more than anyone can reasonably do if you add in all the emailing, chasing copyrights, etc that "Laurel" does.

Add to that the inconsistency in the handling of rejections and you must have more than one "editor".

 

[A7inchPhildo]

" You can stay where you are and watch television honey," my wife said "I'm just going
to take Skip for a walk."


I was waiting for when she started to the bathroom. I pulled Kim to me and kissed her before
she could resist. I tasted cum in her mouth. I soon had her on the couch and sucking the cum
that had survived the walk back. Kim looked frightened but I acted as if nothing was out of the
ordinary. I didn't try that again but something else happened. Skip was an old dog and one
morning we woke to find that he had went to happy dog land in the night. I felt that Kim's
sorrow was more motivated by not having him to take on her walks. Being the good husband I was
I had a present for Kim when she came home for work that night. I never have seen a woman so
happy at getting a new dog as a present. She gave him his first walk that night.





Now that you have read it I am not looking for your gramatical comments but just for discussion on the reason given for the rejection.

Steve,

I read your story and I must say under the guidelines you agree to while submiting to Literotica. I too would reject this story. Actually I would reject it for a couple of things.

I am sure Laurel just picked up on the obvious and sent it back. One of the reasons to request an editor is to have some one out side of your narrow mind read it. Don't take it personal I can't see my own mistakes half the time.

Here is what you did, more so at the end than in the beginning or middle. You may not know this but skippy (the dog) is a character. When you separate your paragraphs properly. (which you did not) Comments about skippy directly will be in a separate paragraph verses erotic material. It is not a bad habbit when submitting at Lit to start a new paragraph each time a different character is taking the stage.

I can only guess the next reply from Laurel will be you need to separate your paragraphs. "That is if you wipe skippy out of the story and submit it as is. Of course she is going to say the spelling is poor also "I" not "i" The obvious is the beastiality problem yes she was correct in rejecting it. No the story is not remotely beastiality but the form sugests it is.


I just broke the last paragraph up the rest should be done accordingly. Since 'Beastiality' is not tolerated at Lit there should be no erotic descriptions depicting human and animal in the same paragraph.
That is not the same as two dogs, they can have sex. While two people have sex. All in the same proximity. I have friends who have such stories posted on Lit and the dog sex is quite graphic. "Puke to me but hey"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I was waiting for when she started to the bathroom. I pulled Kim to me and kissed her before she could resist. I tasted cum in her mouth. I soon had her on the couch and sucking the cum
that had survived the walk back. Kim looked frightened but I acted as if nothing was out of the
ordinary. I didn't try that again.

Something else happened. Skip was an old dog and one
morning we woke to find that he had went to happy dog land in the night.

I felt that Kim's sorrow was more motivated by not having him to take on her walks. Being the good husband I was I had a present for Kim when she came home for work that night. I never have seen a woman so
happy at getting a new dog as a present.

She gave him his first walk that night.

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I know this is not the forum really for this but,
I would like to say Steve this is a good idea. I follow the story and get a basic idea of what you wanted to write. If you were to take the time and reform it a little adding some more highlights and removing some of the mistakes. Good chance it could score pretty high with the readers. But you need more non sexual descriptions of what is taking place to do that.

 

[A7inchPhildo]

A STORY THAT I HAD SUBIMITTED WAS REJECTED WITH THE FOLLOWING REASON GIVEN..( DID YOUR STORY CONTAIN DESCRIPTIONS OF BESTIALITY WHICH IS NOT ACCEPTED IN THIS SITE) First of all the story is posted below and naturally contained not a hint of Beastiality. Second the number of persons that were supposed to have reviewed the story was listed as (6) SIX. I am troubled that this many editors do not have the ability to read something. The story was posted for Loving Wives and had the title walking the dog( which is an approitate title for those that bother to read without rejecting something out of hand without the bother to read it. The description of the story stated : Husband Discovers that Pet is Wife's Best Friend....Now
what is wrong with that description? I have the urge to say the word (Idiots) BUT i WILL NOT...STILL i AM STRONGLY THINKING IT..


Steve notice the "DID" in the reply.
(6) is not reviewed 6 times it was opened six times. Every click registers as a view if it is read or not. I think it was read and determined it needed clarification between human and beast.
The title is acceptable.
The description is a clasic set up to announce doggy sex. Probably not what rejected you though.
Try something like, "Wife's best friend brings her to new friends" or "Family pet allows wife to go to the park

 

[Guest]

it's all moot now

The story was printed with the description changed to " Wife loves walks" I still say there
was nothing wrong with the one I did. Also although the story did contain errors I will not change any story to make a new paragraph for each character. Why many paragraphs would be no more than a short sentence. Grammar has become such a nit picking issue. It's like assholes. Everyone has a different one. There are more rules of grammar than there are stars in the sky.
Some people are so anal retentive that every time they read something they have to change it to their concept of how it should be. Just one thing thgough. Don't read mine then. Stories written in the style that you prefere are probably not the kind I would write anyway.. Just a thought Phildo

 

[HawaiiBill]

Calm down steevereno

"...I will not change any story to make a new paragraph for each character."

I missed whatever it is you responded to, missed it in the thread but it makes no difference.

Let me suggest something to you that will help your stories in any online presentation, especially those such as Literotica with narrow columns:

Make all paragraphs short.

When reading type against a lighted, white background, the eye has an easier time if there are breaks in the text at least every six or seven lines. You can test this yourself if you find a story that wasn't carefully edited with long paragraphs -- more than 12 lines.

Your eye will tend to lose track of the lines -- the lines you have read being harder to track against the next lines following. I didn't make this up, it's a demonstrated fact in a study I read so long ago I don't think it's findable.

That study was made in relation to newspaper makeup, by the way. You may note that virtually every newspaper, with their narrow columns, use very short paragraphs.

You are wrong if you think this is 'grammar.' It isn't. Rather, it is a factor of page layout in favor of heightened readability and that's a worthy goal.

Keep something else in mind. Literotica is owned by what you can relate to as a publisher. The publisher of any literary venture has no obligation to print your story or mine or phildo's. THIS publisher prints most of them, however, with very few restrictions on subject matter.

Publishers also have the right to edit copy they use. If you don't like that, jerk your story.

It's rare that a story gets bounced and, in my opinion, most need more editing! So look at the positive side and be thankful that we have Literotica as a great and growing collection of erotica. With that attitude, you'll be a welcome new contributor.