Really? explain this -_-

[HarryHill]

story rejected:
Were there URL links, site addresses, or other advertisements within the story? Author's notes contains solicitation reference


Harry's Notes: This story began when I was asked if I would ghostwrite for some E-rag that had read my stories on this site. I was given a premise and required to submit 5000 words in order to earn $50.00 if my writing passed muster, well... it was short a couple of words, no big deal, but the editor they assigned me threw a hissy fit because there was no sex scene in the first so many words, pissed me off. -_- I kept it, now sometime later I am giving it to you, hope you enjoy it.
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[HandsInTheDark]

I don't see why that was cause for rejection, but it's certainly whiny. Drop the note entirely and try again.

 

[ElectricBlue]

The reference to the E-rag was probably enough - the Ed could thinking there might be a link in the body of the text.

Remove the note. All it does is tell readers you have written a crappy story with a bolt-on sex scene - why should I read it at all? Sloppy seconds.

And put a note in the Notes to Editor confirming that there are no links elsewhere in the text.

 

[butters]

The reference to the E-rag was probably enough - the Ed could thinking there might be a link in the body of the text.

Remove the note. All it does is tell readers you have written a crappy story with a bolt-on sex scene - why should I read it at all? Sloppy seconds.

And put a note in the Notes to Editor confirming that there are no links elsewhere in the text.

whilst i agree about dropping the author's note, the remainder is wrong on so many levels - and since i've been able to read some of the story i can speak with some insight, His writing is way better than that, which is why he garners red H's for just about all of his prose.

H - simply drop the note and try resubbing.

 

[HarryHill]

Harry's Notes: This story began when I was asked if I would ghostwrite for some *DELETED* that had read my stories on this site. I was given a premise and required to submit 5000 words in order to earn *DELETED* if my writing passed muster, well... it was short a couple of words, no big deal, but the *DELETED* they assigned me threw a hissy fit because there was no sex scene in the first so many words, pissed me off. -_- I kept it, now, after rewriting this introduction for the third time I am giving it to you, hope you enjoy it.

think this might work?

 

[Bramblethorn]

Harry's Notes: This story began when I was asked if I would ghostwrite for some *DELETED* that had read my stories on this site. I was given a premise and required to submit 5000 words in order to earn *DELETED* if my writing passed muster, well... it was short a couple of words, no big deal, but the *DELETED* they assigned me threw a hissy fit because there was no sex scene in the first so many words, pissed me off. -_- I kept it, now, after rewriting this introduction for the third time I am giving it to you, hope you enjoy it.

think this might work?

Might get past moderation, but it just sounds like unnecessary grumbling. If I came across a note like that, I'd be less interested in reading the rest of the story.

If you really feel like you need to tell readers the story's origin, I'd suggest cutting it down to something less aggrieved: "This story began as a commission for another reader who decided they didn't like it, so you get to read it instead!"

 

[sr71plt]

No matter who he said didn't like it before, he'd come across as defensive and whining. Now if he said it was originally turned down because of the outrageous sex acts depicted as reeled through, one after the other, by performers on a trapeze above a cheering crowd under the big top, he'd probably get good reader response. But then he'd be disappointed in the outcome, because he says it was turned down for taking too long to get around to sex and the readers would be blowing raspberries at him. The bottom line is that, after reading this thread, I wouldn't read it no matter how he changed the submission, both because of the whining and the reason for turning it down by the other Web site in the first place.

So, Harry need only look to himself for the explanation he seeks.

 

[HarryHill]

sr71plt you still continue to stretch my screen after all this time. If you'd just break that sig line into several parts it wouldn't do that

 

[sr71plt]

sr71plt you still continue to stretch my screen after all this time. If you'd just break that sig line into several parts it wouldn't do that

And you continue to think that your personal problem should be solved by someone else when there's no problem in my view and the site supports my use of it.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

sr71plt you still continue to stretch my screen after all this time. If you'd just break that sig line into several parts it wouldn't do that

No stretch here. You browser might have a been infected with something. Try uninstalling it and then reinstall.

As for your note at the beginning of your story...it does sound whiny...try moving it to the end of the story.

 

[TxRad]

No stretch here. You browser might have a been infected with something. Try uninstalling it and then reinstall.

As for your note at the beginning of your story...it does sound whiny...try moving it to the end of the story.

More likely his zoom is bumped way up and or his screen is small.

No stretch here.

 

[HarryHill]

Thanks for the feed back guys

 

[Zeb_Carter]

More likely his zoom is bumped way up and or his screen is small.

No stretch here.

But he said it's only Pilot who stretches his screen...he might have the pilot bug.

 

[OmnislashXX]

Senior Pilot doesn't stretch my screen, though I could do without the many manly muscles his many pics show off.

Well, I suppose this is an equal opportunity website.