Read my latest story please!

[DG Hear]

Hi, I'm DG Hear and my latest story just came up. Since most of you have read the Earth Day submissions and are looking for something to read. (haha), I would like feedback on my latest. My editors said it's one of my best. So if you have 20 minutes to waste, I would appreciate feedback on this one. Here's a direct link to the story, If I did it right.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=306484&page=1

Thank you for any comments, positive or negative.

Also thank those of you who read and voted on my two 'Earth Day' stories. I do appreciate it. They may not win any awards but I did obtain the little 'H' next to them, thanks to you.
Your fellow author (using the term loosely)
DG Hear

 

[Vermilion]

try the story feedback forum...
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[FallingToFly]

Read and commented. Hopefully it'll show up this time.