Puzzled

[sirhugs]

I have not had a story get as low scores as my new one, An Older Man Experience in ages.

I am not sure if it is disappointed "first time" readers who expected something simpler, or if I just blew it.

I was prepared for mediocre scores, but sub 4 really sucks.

Any thoughts?

 

[wishfulthinking]

Hi Sirhugs!

I admit to never having read this category before, so I wasn't sure what to expect, but I think a virgin getting it on with her co-workers, boss and his wife was probably more suited to the group sex category.

You had some interesting thoughts throughout it, but you never seemed to take them up and flesh them out. Why was she a virgin tease? How long had she the hots for her boss? How often had she played with cindy? I didn't have much of a feel for any of the characters or why they were doing what they were doing.

But I gave it a 5 - you don't have public comments?

 

[sirhugs]

Hi Sirhugs!

I admit to never having read this category before, so I wasn't sure what to expect, but I think a virgin getting it on with her co-workers, boss and his wife was probably more suited to the group sex category.

You had some interesting thoughts throughout it, but you never seemed to take them up and flesh them out. Why was she a virgin tease? How long had she the hots for her boss? How often had she played with cindy? I didn't have much of a feel for any of the characters or why they were doing what they were doing.

But I gave it a 5 - you don't have public comments?

Thanks for responding.

The twist of the group ending was not in the original plot, so I had conceived this as a first time story. After , I thought it might be better to surprise the reader. Now I know better, I guess.

All the charracters but Cindy were in earlier stories. I suppose I left to much out in fear of boring readers of earlier episodes. I understand your point about motivations.

No public comments. Still not that sure about the whole idea.