Prize winning bad (opening) sentence; Bulwer Lytton competition

[Pure]

Guigli's winning entry read: "Detective Bart Lasiter was in his office studying the light from his one small window falling on his super burrito when the door swung open to reveal a woman whose body said you've had your last burrito for a while, whose face said angels did exist, and whose eyes said she could make you dig your own grave and lick the shovel clean."

 

[Tom Collins]

Jesus wept.

 

[Huckleman2000]

I love this contest too.

Maybe I didn't have the right Thread heading before

Hopefully this one gets the attention it deserves! These are some absolutely stunning sentences!

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Guigli's winning entry read: "Detective Bart Lasiter was in his office studying the light from his one small window falling on his super burrito when the door swung open to reveal a woman whose body said you've had your last burrito for a while, whose face said angels did exist, and whose eyes said she could make you dig your own grave and lick the shovel clean."

Yes, Pure,

I see what you mean. This sentence is horrid. He's missing a comma after the word "studying". Damn! Doesn't anyone know how to punctuate!!!!!