Possessed by her Nightmares

[CiaoSteve]

A little erotic horror for the Halloween Competition. An ancient artefact, a young woman, a Mayan chief and some very realistic dreams all rolled up into a couple of @Lit pages. She becomes possessed by her nightmares (literally) but what do they want with her?

Hope you enjoy

https://www.literotica.com/s/dream-stone

 

[8letters]

I'm not an Erotic Horror reader, so take my comment accordingly. I read it a little bit. She has her first dream, which I thought was well-described and effective. When the dream was over, I expected to be introduced to the character and the set up. Instead, you almost right away start another dream. I wasn't interested in reading about another dream had by an unknown character.

 

[ElectricBlue]

As a technical observation - if you're writing in first person, a sentence like this:

I was unaware of the door opening in real life and Mel standing there in my bedroom, looking down at my shaking frame, naked on top of my mattress. I was unaware of the eerie greenish glow filling my room, gently permeating through the darkness of the night.

can't be used. If the first person narrator is unaware of an event, she can't describe it. You've momentarily lapsed into third person narrative.

 

[CiaoSteve]

Fair points from both of you . . . . I'll think about how to address

Thanks for the feedback.