Popped My Lit Cherry!

[saucyvox]

I just had my first story accepted here at Literotica. I'd love some feedback on the story. I take criticism very, very well, so please don't hesitate to let me know what you don't like or feel I could improve upon. Here's the link:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=217255

I'm a newbie to the forums/site, but not a newbie to the lifestyle. Thanks for taking the time to read!

Saucy

 

[cymry]

Nicely written

I'm not a fan of BDSM, but your story was well written. Keep them coming...no pun intended.

 

[oOScarletWingsOo]

Newbie!!

Hurray. It says you've been a member since July and this is the first you've gotten around to posting a story?

Thumbs up for posting your first piece. I gave you some feedback. I always let other's know that they can PM me if they want me to go into more detail. You can do the same.

SW

 

[alrem]

Nice game indeed

 

[saucyvox]

Thanks all. I posted a second one shortly after the first one was approved. It's over here:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=217760

I'm living the straight life now so writing BDSM erotica is my only outlet. I have to admit I'm having a blast.

Saucy

 

[cymry]

Posted comment

I like your style of writing, even if the subject is not one I usually read.

Keep writing.

 

[Winemaster]

enjoyed the story

action, pain- sex! I loved the describing of thoughts during the acts....got me very involved!

 

[Rattlesnake1775]

Good Job

Wish my first story would have been that good. But then again, would have robbed me off my learning curve...or is that the learning straight? Anyways, good job. Keep it up. Or don't, then I don't feel like there's another writer out there who is better then me!

Stupid low self esteem!