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[Caitlyn O'Shame]

Having only recently begun to submit erotic poetry, I would really welcome some comments and opinions on my poems. Please check under Caitlyn_oshame.
Here are the cutrrent URLs

Happy Hour
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=20459

He Touched Me Like No One Else
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=19987

My Reflection
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=20487


Thanks all,
Caitlyn

 

[JUDO]

Interesting...

COS -

Are you registered twice on here? I think that may be one of the reasons you are not getting any feedback with this thread.

There is a "Caitlyn O'Shame" and a "Caitlyn_OShame." Under the listed post above (and to the left), there are no poetry listings and the age is listed as "over 18."

Under "Caitlyn_OShame" there are three listings:

Happy Hour
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=20459

He Touched Me Like No One Else
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=19987

My Reflection
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=20487

Also, you need to post the URLs with your request. Makes it easy for those like me, who are too lazy to look it up.

I liked "He Touched Me Like No One Else" the best, but "Reflection" was cool. Took me there. Typically, I prefer a box, a structure on poetry more than just "free verse." Yes, free verse can be very powerful, but then again, so was Shakespeare.

- Judo

 

[Guest]

Your poems

Happy Hour.........

Wasn't really all that impressed with Happy Hour (to be honest)
But then I read "He touched me".....now that one I really enjoyed.
More along "my" tastes anyway. So don't get too upset with me
just because I wasn't all that excited over "Happy Hour".

And then of course...I finished up with "My reflection". And I also liked that one too. Fun and "bouncy"...a good image for the act taking place.

All in all however...I gave you my personal preference on "He touched me."

Again...just one man's opinion. But you asked for it.

To sleep.......perchance to dream - William Shakespear