Poetry and Soulmates

[johnniedreamer3]

I wrote a poem about my dream of meeting my soulmate someday. My dream is that someday someone will read this and feel everything I felt when I wrote it, and that maybe, just maybe that will be my soulmate.

So let me know what you feel?

And I'm also curious if there are others out there writing poetry about a soulmate dream?

Ciao,
John

 

[johnniedreamer3]

Wrote this one for a new friend....

The Awakening

I feel your heart so close to mine.
Chills through my body, run down my spine.
The winds of love blow through us,
Awakening the secret sensations of the soul.
Waves of passion roll over us,
Covering us with drops of wild winter.

I feel your hand in mine,
Smiles in my eyes, reason divine.
Sunshine on our bodies.
Warmth in our hearts.
Springtime in bouncy steps.
Life anew, a start.



Let me know what you think...
John

 

[WickedEve]

I hope you find your soulmate. Your poem didn't really speak to me. There was no mention of ass spanking but it was still sweet.
Now let's talk poetry. You speak of eyes becoming windows to the soul and rolling waves of passion and etc. Phrases like those keep your poem from touching me, and that's because those phrases have been around for a long time (cliche). In your second poem you offer the reader "Covering us with drops of wild winter." I like drops of wild winter. It sounds nice and more original.
I do hope your poetry leads you to the right one.

 

[Tathagata]

I hope you find your soulmate. Your poem didn't really speak to me. There was no mention of ass spanking

rofl


i can see this being mentioned in the Poetry 101 handbook

 

[WickedEve]

rofl


i can see this being mentioned in the Poetry 101 handbook

Well, it was an original comment!

 

[Tathagata]

Well, it was an original comment!

you are always original dear

 

[johnniedreamer3]

I hope you find your soulmate. Your poem didn't really speak to me. There was no mention of ass spanking but it was still sweet.
Now let's talk poetry. You speak of eyes becoming windows to the soul and rolling waves of passion and etc. Phrases like those keep your poem from touching me, and that's because those phrases have been around for a long time (cliche). In your second poem you offer the reader "Covering us with drops of wild winter." I like drops of wild winter. It sounds nice and more original.
I do hope your poetry leads you to the right one.

Thanks for your comments, Eve. I hope you have a chance to get covered with those drops of wild winter...coming soon!
John

 

[fallin_snow]

anyway

i think they are very good.

not sure if my vote counts but anyway there you go. i hope you do more though.

 

[johnniedreamer3]

Re: anyway

i think they are very good.

not sure if my vote counts but anyway there you go. i hope you do more though.

You're vote most definately counts...thanks for your kind words and tender heart.

 

[fallin_snow]

Re: Re: anyway

anytime, good poetry needs to be comilimented and prasied. and poetry that shows love to me is even more special.

do you have any more by chance.. *blush*?

You're vote most definately counts...thanks for your kind words and tender heart.