Poems of Love and Despair

[LongSlow4Plays]

This is one of my poems,,,that has swing,,,Rythum ,,and Rhyme
I thought it be good for starters

Down Deeply
(DEPRESSION)

I feel so lonely & so low,
As if I’ve lost a friend..
I have no where to go,
But maybe the near, near end.
To feel so low & so down,
As if I’ve been abused.
To be a little beneath the ground,
To except, I’ve been used.
To have raised spirits of someone else,
And in turn be stepped on.
As a book placed upon the shelves,
Or being walked upon the lawn.
To have opened up myself so well ,
And splattered against the wall.
As a hammer has hit a bell ,
Just go ahead . .
& let me fall . . .

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[LongSlow4Plays]

As if one

AS IF ONE
(an obsession )

There is one individual in this world,
that brings happiness & fullfilment to another one.
With two to become as closely as united,
then to go off separate ways- without.
Even though they may have been separated,
for awhile, yet still together spiritually.
For now deep inside they still carry this feeling,
to care for the other. .
And as time passes by, the longer it goes;
the stronger it may become.
For one person to run from the other,
to try to escape the circumstances of.
May put one in locked period of time,-leaving
the thoughts,memories,images of the other.
For this one-
is lost , in a world of mirrors reflecting the other;
hoping to be found & woken from this dream. . .

Searching for another to replace,
that emptiness inside of one's heart.
Looking for that warm sensation,
that feeling of love- that once was realistic.
To be able to find some one,
with qualities & chareteristics as before.
And then to imagine,not to think of the one,
or to remember as was at- first.
To erase all of memory,
would be taking part of one's life & self.
Would not be able to forget,
the love,the happiness,that special feeling.
To find such person,one would realize:
is lost but -not forgotten.
To find all-
all of those & more,in another person;
for this one,as still in one's thoughts
and in one's dreams. . .

For one to be present & or close,
as of the other.
To feel the sensitivity of the other,
one feels the presense-to be psychic.
To feel the emotional experience,
of the other,without sight or sound.
As one to be sick or under,
for one to feel as other.
To have the clairvoyance,
the power to know of the other.
As one so close to suffer, as death -to ask;
then to think of the other,as a fight to live.
For one-
to perceive the future,places,things,of;
may make one, more attached to the other. . .

To have been bereft,
or as lovelorn.
To become one as if one,
then for one who is so, -so true.
Over the unification, as of the other,
on the personal senses of one.
To sleep or rest at night,
and see the other so true & real.
As said to forget the love of one,
may not forget the one that is true.
As months go by,
time seems to stand a still.
To have one come so close,
will make one stutter in breath.
To have one's heart ,beat- so quick:
to catch that breath,to live again.
For as one-
who has valence,may be left,
in the shadows & mirrors;
reflecting the other. . .

this Poem took 4 yrs to complete
to get in the mood,,to find the right words to discribe the Right Meaning
and to put it down,it is Rather Longgg and too long for most Publishers
But it has its Point-- Its Meaning,,,and Rather Deep emotionally

 

[champagne1982]

Would you like critique or would you like us all just to click on your thread and then back out again? It reads like a vanity press book in that it's all your poems and your notes, not that there's anything wrong with that. I just wanna know if it's worth coming back to this thread.

 

[LongSlow4Plays]

Would you like critique or would you like us all just to click on your thread and then back out again? It reads like a vanity press book in that it's all your poems and your notes, not that there's anything wrong with that. I just wanna know if it's worth coming back to this thread.

If you want to be a critique,,, a commentary its up to you
i was just sharing, my Poetry
evidently you have shared your thoughts too

 

[bamagirl]

great poems sweety they make you stop and think

 

[bamagirl]

will we get more poems??

 

[LongSlow4Plays]

The Fire

will we get more poems??

HE FIRE

As the Fire goes to burn,
The logs go to turn;
As the Fire slowly approaches,
The logs ride like coaches....

As the Fire begins to slaughter,
The logs get even hotter;
As theh Fire grows stronger,
The logs can burn longer....

As the Fire begins to grow,
The logs just sit there and glow;
As the Fire slowly begins,
The logs slowly ends.....

 

[bamagirl]

thank you