Kumani
Really Experienced
- Joined
- Aug 6, 2006
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Hi everyone 
I am looking for uncensored feedback on these poems.
Tell me what you think.
Any improvements I should make?
What do you think?
Which one do you like the best?
Which one do you not like?
Hold no punches
Thanks a bunch
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DENIAL
I hate the way you lie and pretend to be something you’re not.
I feel disgust at the way you deceive yourself day in and day out.
Everyday seems to be a sorrowful burden for you,
Never knowing when finally you will be outed and your secret subsequently revealed.
Confronting you with reality was much easier than it seemed.
But you turned a blind eye, closed the shutters and locked the doors on me.
You refused to accept fact and declared that it was not what it seemed.
You turned your back on me and refused to believe what I proclaimed.
I did not try to convince, nor change anything and
Guess what to this day it remains the same.
*************************
IN SEARCH OF RECOGNITION
I refuse to make any apologies
I refuse to take a side
I am not confused I am not a traitor
What I do know is this…
I yearn for succulent, moist flesh,
Tenderness,
Softness,
Familiarity.
I want a chick to call my own with a pretty face and a tight frame.
These are some of the things my dreams are made of.
Yet I am still into dick.
I want a gorgeous, sexy guy who can drive me wild.
That can make sweet passionate love to me to the point that I might even begin to cry.
This too I dream of.
So for the last time,
Accept me for who I am.
I am here and will always be sexual so get used to it.
************************
A BLISSFUL NIGHT
Tonight’s the night
It’s time to close the deal
All restraint is gone
I’ve waited much too long
First, second, third, fourth date
Tonight I’m definitely having cake.
Light the candles sweetheart.
Dim the lights.
Let’s undress each other and admire what we’ve been lusting after for so long.
Have a sip or two of this panty remover
Hands, fingers, probing, lips, so moist…
Intoxicating.
Let our fingers do the talking.
Licking, tasting, munching, nibbling
Fucking.
Ride this emotional roller coaster with me.
Let your juices bubble to the top
Drench me in your honeydew wetness.
Satiate my ravenous thirst.
You taste so sweet.
How I’ve waited so long.
Now as I lay wide-awake in the dark with sweat drenched skin.
Remnants of you still on my tongue,
Your special scent coating my fingertips,
I plan my escape.
In the morning I will painfully try to erase the memory of you uttering those words
I love you.
************************
ALL THE SWEET BULLSHIT
They are meaningless.
I love you, I miss you, I care for you, you complete me…
Syllables strung together to form words that wound,
Words that hurt, words that pierce one’s vulnerable heart and shatters it into a millions shards.
Words of endearment – I think not.
Words of mass destruction.
For they are nothing more than nonsensical babble,
That spews forth from the mouths of liars, the mouths of betrayers, the mouths of cheaters.
They are used as bait to seize vulnerable prey.
Used as venom to subdue a victim then the slow death begins.
The person that once loved you, once missed you, once cared for you,
The person who was your other self, your missing half is no more.
Not anymore they say.
Feelings have changed.
After all what was once said can be recanted.
It was only words, empty statements said in the heat of the moment, a moment of unrestrained passion,
A moment when the little head usurps the big head.
It was only words.
****************
IS IT LOVE? IS IT LUST?
You intoxicate me.
You ignite a fire within me.
You torment me.
You tempt me.
You complete me.
I am like a slave…addicted to your love.
*************
A SCHOLASTIC CRUSH
Watching
Waiting
Hoping
Aching for you
Do you see me?
Or am I just student X ?
Forever unseen
I am looking for uncensored feedback on these poems.
Tell me what you think.
Any improvements I should make?
What do you think?
Which one do you like the best?
Which one do you not like?
Hold no punches
Thanks a bunch
**********************************
DENIAL
I hate the way you lie and pretend to be something you’re not.
I feel disgust at the way you deceive yourself day in and day out.
Everyday seems to be a sorrowful burden for you,
Never knowing when finally you will be outed and your secret subsequently revealed.
Confronting you with reality was much easier than it seemed.
But you turned a blind eye, closed the shutters and locked the doors on me.
You refused to accept fact and declared that it was not what it seemed.
You turned your back on me and refused to believe what I proclaimed.
I did not try to convince, nor change anything and
Guess what to this day it remains the same.
*************************
IN SEARCH OF RECOGNITION
I refuse to make any apologies
I refuse to take a side
I am not confused I am not a traitor
What I do know is this…
I yearn for succulent, moist flesh,
Tenderness,
Softness,
Familiarity.
I want a chick to call my own with a pretty face and a tight frame.
These are some of the things my dreams are made of.
Yet I am still into dick.
I want a gorgeous, sexy guy who can drive me wild.
That can make sweet passionate love to me to the point that I might even begin to cry.
This too I dream of.
So for the last time,
Accept me for who I am.
I am here and will always be sexual so get used to it.
************************
A BLISSFUL NIGHT
Tonight’s the night
It’s time to close the deal
All restraint is gone
I’ve waited much too long
First, second, third, fourth date
Tonight I’m definitely having cake.
Light the candles sweetheart.
Dim the lights.
Let’s undress each other and admire what we’ve been lusting after for so long.
Have a sip or two of this panty remover
Hands, fingers, probing, lips, so moist…
Intoxicating.
Let our fingers do the talking.
Licking, tasting, munching, nibbling
Fucking.
Ride this emotional roller coaster with me.
Let your juices bubble to the top
Drench me in your honeydew wetness.
Satiate my ravenous thirst.
You taste so sweet.
How I’ve waited so long.
Now as I lay wide-awake in the dark with sweat drenched skin.
Remnants of you still on my tongue,
Your special scent coating my fingertips,
I plan my escape.
In the morning I will painfully try to erase the memory of you uttering those words
I love you.
************************
ALL THE SWEET BULLSHIT
They are meaningless.
I love you, I miss you, I care for you, you complete me…
Syllables strung together to form words that wound,
Words that hurt, words that pierce one’s vulnerable heart and shatters it into a millions shards.
Words of endearment – I think not.
Words of mass destruction.
For they are nothing more than nonsensical babble,
That spews forth from the mouths of liars, the mouths of betrayers, the mouths of cheaters.
They are used as bait to seize vulnerable prey.
Used as venom to subdue a victim then the slow death begins.
The person that once loved you, once missed you, once cared for you,
The person who was your other self, your missing half is no more.
Not anymore they say.
Feelings have changed.
After all what was once said can be recanted.
It was only words, empty statements said in the heat of the moment, a moment of unrestrained passion,
A moment when the little head usurps the big head.
It was only words.
****************
IS IT LOVE? IS IT LUST?
You intoxicate me.
You ignite a fire within me.
You torment me.
You tempt me.
You complete me.
I am like a slave…addicted to your love.
*************
A SCHOLASTIC CRUSH
Watching
Waiting
Hoping
Aching for you
Do you see me?
Or am I just student X ?
Forever unseen
