Poem

[white_lace]

what did every one think of the poem the beauty of love by me. white_lace. I would like your opinion on it if you have read it.

 

[JUDO]

what did every one think of the poem the beauty of love by me. white_lace. I would like your opinion on it if you have read it.

Òla, newby. First, most readers will not go to the trouble (and no one should expect them to) to find your poem and read it. So, include a link with your post:

Here's how:
Use brackets [] instead of the paranthesis () I have in the example below, and this will become a link to your poem in blue.

(url="http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=65573")(color=blue)the beauty of love(/color)(/url)

It would look like this: the beauty of love

And second, post your wants for poetry feedback in the Poetry Forum rather than the Story Feedback Forum (where you are now). You'll likely get better results and see all the fun stuff the poets here talk about and play with.


Feedback: Use more standardized forms for your poetry. At first glance, it looks like you posted a prose paragraph. Don't use abbreviations inconsistently -- "u" AND "you" are present in your poem. It's a short poem, but even at this length, three analogies for the same thing "your love" is too much. Variety would work better.

Welcome to Lit!


- Judo