Star At Sunrise
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- Apr 24, 2002
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Hi everyone. Some really great poems today. I’m going to review a few, if you don’t mind. I was reading the new poems list and got carried away. I didn’t read before posting, so some of these were probably already mentioned. If they were, they’re good enough to be mentioned twice! I hope my mad HTML skillz don't let me down here.
I wish it was possible to mention them all, but here are a few poems from Feb 20 that caught my eye.
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make it real by silken dreammaid
write one word
find another,
you have begun.
I thought the creative process is captured nicely here. Anyone who doodles and still writes poetry longhand should identify. I liked this poem a lot. One of three poems by silken dreammaid that I found especially memorable.
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Domination by paul c
Creative and original form. I thought this created a brilliant word pattern on the paper. You can kind of read and absorb the poem through your peripheral vision.
(And just to let you know, I somehow spelled "peripheral" right without using spellcheck!!! Wow!)
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A Thought On Compromise by Mythos50
Nice and short, the last word makes the whole poem work! Good job!
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Tangled Fluorescence by JUDO by JUDO
Sublime imitation, wrapped with pixel haunt
Like her fingertips, playing some neuron buzz,
But blue mist pulses pretty at Sappho's pool;
Perfect algorithms for the perfect fool.
Holy crap! That’s some kick ass imagery! Great, JUDO!
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Awakening by finestsilk
Yellow fingers of the morning
Zig and Zag across the sky
All the birds have started singing
Bloating the morning with their cries
I’m glad I didn’t skip this one! Now THIS is poetry! Clever structure (would have made a GREAT contest) and some incredible lines inside. One of my favorites of the day.
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Lover Sleep by 03sp
went along, down low
into the fatty shadows
and
best held ideas are inner and allowed to leak
and run on those sudden days, waving.
Just an excellent poem. What else can you say?
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We're Fucking Through! by IcumIst
Fucking bitter? Oh, yeah, you bet,
But you ain't seen nothing, Fucking yet!
Probably my favorite poem of the day! It just makes me grin every time I read it. I love the power of the anger, yet it still retains humor and style. Icum1st, will you be my 2004 Valentine? I promise I’ll let you cum first!
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An Ode To Spike Milligan by Awen
The words from my knee
Said fiddle dee dee
The words from my toe
Were way to slow
And were not heard
Until a quarter to tea
I thought the part I quoted above was a great progression of lines. Good work, Awen!
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Watching The Daylight by blue dolphin
I liked the simple, direct message, and I’m such a sucker for the spacing at the ending.
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Cries in the Night by DreamCatcherPoet
A horror verse? Chilling and scary, in BWL’s familiar style. Good!
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Puppies First Fright by DreamCatcherPoet
This was nice too. I can imagine it thrilling a young reader. If this poet keeps on writing, he’ll have a pretty sizable book of poetry.
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What is left? by silken dreammaid
only bone without
our covering gift
of perceived shame.
Another scary poem! Is it Halloween already? This one is really excellent, thought provoking. Just the right length.
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Tangled Fluorescence by silken dreammaid
Water bloated balloons
blob in endless undulations.
Fringes wafting with
tenticular threads
of water driven lace.
All the poems in the "Tangled Fluorescence" group were great, but finally someone gets the jellyfish image! And "water driven lace?" Incredible choice of words. I wish I had thought of it!
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A Virgin's Tale by machoman
Wow! That’s a erotic poem you don’t see everyday, do you? What effort must have been put in by machoman. Great work.
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Boy, all of you who review on a regular basis, I take my hat off to you. This is a lot of work! But reading all these cool, creative poems are worth it!
Again, there are tons and tons of other great poems I read today and didn’t mention and wish I could have. All of you poets are an inspiration. Thanks!
I wish it was possible to mention them all, but here are a few poems from Feb 20 that caught my eye.
~~~~
make it real by silken dreammaid
write one word
find another,
you have begun.
I thought the creative process is captured nicely here. Anyone who doodles and still writes poetry longhand should identify. I liked this poem a lot. One of three poems by silken dreammaid that I found especially memorable.
~~
Domination by paul c
Creative and original form. I thought this created a brilliant word pattern on the paper. You can kind of read and absorb the poem through your peripheral vision.
(And just to let you know, I somehow spelled "peripheral" right without using spellcheck!!! Wow!)
~~
A Thought On Compromise by Mythos50
Nice and short, the last word makes the whole poem work! Good job!
~~
Tangled Fluorescence by JUDO by JUDO
Sublime imitation, wrapped with pixel haunt
Like her fingertips, playing some neuron buzz,
But blue mist pulses pretty at Sappho's pool;
Perfect algorithms for the perfect fool.
Holy crap! That’s some kick ass imagery! Great, JUDO!
~~
Awakening by finestsilk
Yellow fingers of the morning
Zig and Zag across the sky
All the birds have started singing
Bloating the morning with their cries
I’m glad I didn’t skip this one! Now THIS is poetry! Clever structure (would have made a GREAT contest) and some incredible lines inside. One of my favorites of the day.
~~
Lover Sleep by 03sp
went along, down low
into the fatty shadows
and
best held ideas are inner and allowed to leak
and run on those sudden days, waving.
Just an excellent poem. What else can you say?
~~
We're Fucking Through! by IcumIst
Fucking bitter? Oh, yeah, you bet,
But you ain't seen nothing, Fucking yet!
Probably my favorite poem of the day! It just makes me grin every time I read it. I love the power of the anger, yet it still retains humor and style. Icum1st, will you be my 2004 Valentine? I promise I’ll let you cum first!
~~
An Ode To Spike Milligan by Awen
The words from my knee
Said fiddle dee dee
The words from my toe
Were way to slow
And were not heard
Until a quarter to tea
I thought the part I quoted above was a great progression of lines. Good work, Awen!
~~
Watching The Daylight by blue dolphin
I liked the simple, direct message, and I’m such a sucker for the spacing at the ending.
~~
Cries in the Night by DreamCatcherPoet
A horror verse? Chilling and scary, in BWL’s familiar style. Good!
~~
Puppies First Fright by DreamCatcherPoet
This was nice too. I can imagine it thrilling a young reader. If this poet keeps on writing, he’ll have a pretty sizable book of poetry.
~~
What is left? by silken dreammaid
only bone without
our covering gift
of perceived shame.
Another scary poem! Is it Halloween already? This one is really excellent, thought provoking. Just the right length.
~~
Tangled Fluorescence by silken dreammaid
Water bloated balloons
blob in endless undulations.
Fringes wafting with
tenticular threads
of water driven lace.
All the poems in the "Tangled Fluorescence" group were great, but finally someone gets the jellyfish image! And "water driven lace?" Incredible choice of words. I wish I had thought of it!
~~
A Virgin's Tale by machoman
Wow! That’s a erotic poem you don’t see everyday, do you? What effort must have been put in by machoman. Great work.
~~~~
Boy, all of you who review on a regular basis, I take my hat off to you. This is a lot of work! But reading all these cool, creative poems are worth it!
Again, there are tons and tons of other great poems I read today and didn’t mention and wish I could have. All of you poets are an inspiration. Thanks!
