Plot arc ideas? Insecure dominant female sex addict (nymphomaniac).

[MetaBob]

Tentative title: Valley Winter Loop
Category: Romance? Fetish?
Tags: breasts, consensual, derriere, feet, female dominant, first meeting, high heels, light bondage, spanking, weightlifting.

Becca is a college junior with issues. She's bipolar with a short temper, body dysmorphic, and a sex addict (nymphomaniac). She's traumatized, insecure, and has maddeningly persistent acne. She has trouble trusting men, and her most recent boyfriend dumped her just like all the others. She has also learned ways to make a man lose his mind in sexual pleasure, but feels the need to control her crazy situation. She aspires to be dominant, thinking that might help, but has never tried before.

Chris (PoV) is a first-year medical student with ADD. He meets Becca on a hiking trail where he isn't dressed for a suddenly cold day as she's feeling alone and unlovable. She's dressed more warmly, including gloves. They feel an immediate mutual attraction. She offers to hold his hand to keep it warm.

Chris asks Becca to dinner and she accepts. She asks if he would help clean the house she's house-sitting and he accepts. She quickly seduces him there. Next morning, he finds a note directing him to clean the bathrooms while naked, then go food shopping while she sleeps in. He realizes that she'd pre-planned all of that before picking him up for dinner. She demonstrates her sexual prowess. Later, they argue, resulting in her spanking him as punishment for questioning her, followed by abundant loving aftercare.

Conflicting advice from Becca's lesbian Women's Studies professor and two sympathetic clergy at a female-led church follows, but the best advice Chris and Becca receive is to "let each other in." Becca faces her fears and reluctantly eases her newly dominant leanings, but still demands more of Chris than either is accustomed to. Their Sunday together is the best day ever for both.


About 20K words in, I'm not sure where the story goes, except that both main characters expect that after their two-week winter break they won't be able to spend nearly as much time together, if any. I'm sure I'll figure out where the rest of the story goes (I think I'm about halfway), but thought I might ask if anyone here wanted to volunteer suggestions.

 

[JJA122]

Fetish or BDSM category perhaps? Or the first chapter could be Romance. A nice option would be Novels and Novellas...

No, I'm just going to say it. Romance would be the wrong choice, as it simply doesn't have the right audience. Just look at some of the comments for it. Put it in BDSM with a romance tag.

a sex addict (nymphomaniac)

That could be a plot point. Does she break first after being separated for so long, or does he come back begging for her?

I noticed you said that the house they were staying in, she was house-sitting. Does anything in the plot grow from that?

She's traumatized, insecure, and has maddeningly persistent acne. She has trouble trusting men, and her most recent boyfriend dumped her just like all the others.

So that would change throughout the story right?

 

[MetaBob]

a sex addict (nymphomaniac)

That could be a plot point. Does she break first after being separated for so long, or does he come back begging for her?

A great question, thank you! I'd been assuming that none of the boyfriends ever came (crawling) back, but upon reflection that seems unlikely given who Becca is, and what value she has allowed to be placed on her until now. She has no reason to accept any of them back, of course, since she has no trouble attracting new men.

I noticed you said that the house they were staying in, she was house-sitting. Does anything in the plot grow from that?

They're actually both house-sitting, in different houses. Becca at the house of her Women's Studies prof (who is a slob, and the price of Becca staying there is that the prodigious mess must be cleaned up, which is why she wants Chris' help) while the dorms are closed over winter break, him longer-term at the house of a former prof who's on sabbatical.

She's traumatized, insecure, and has maddeningly persistent acne. She has trouble trusting men, and her most recent boyfriend dumped her just like all the others.

So that would change throughout the story right?

Another good question. I've actually been proceeding under the assumption (largely unnoted, though never far from the conscious) that Becca would dump Chris (the first time she's dumped anyone) when he clashed with her once too often (part of his ADD, it just came to me). And then it would be a matter of how they got together more permanently afterward. Becca would find another temporary boyfriend who turns out to be like all the others (another idea that just occurred to me while considering your comments), while Chris would be devastated at losing Becca and they would get back together somehow. All within their two-week winter break.

Fetish or BDSM category perhaps? Or the first chapter could be Romance. A nice option would be Novels and Novellas...

No, I'm just going to say it. Romance would be the wrong choice, as it simply doesn't have the right audience. Just look at some of the comments for it. Put it in BDSM with a romance tag.

I'll think about that, but I'm not concerned about the occasional negative comment. Some men are threatened by the thought of a confident, capable, assertive woman and lash out in different ways about it. On Lit that seems to mostly take the form of negative or even abusive anonymous comments. I think it's more important to expose people to the idea of loving relationships that might challenge assumptions. And my piece definitely takes the romantic form of this (thanks to Moe Berg for the quote) classic, even clichéd variety:

no more
Boy meets girl, boy loses girl
more like
Man tries to understand what the hell went wrong

Great clarifying thoughts, thank you!

 

[Carnevil9]

It has been the best two-week period in either of their lives, but they are both despairing because it is coming to an end. They each (independently) decide that the best way to end it is with a murder-suicide, since life can only go downhill from here.

He sneaks out to his car/shed/friend's house in the middle of the night to get a gun in order to kill her in her sleep before turning the gun on himself. But when he lets himself back in through the kitchen door, her finds her with two large glasses of lemonade, stirring large dollops of rat poison into each one. They look at each other, first in horror, then in sudden comprehension, and then they both burst out laughing. Realizing just how simpatico they really are, they know now that they can get through anything, even the separation at the end of winter break.

Secure in the knowledge of how perfect they are for each other, they live Happily Ever After.



(I'd been listening to some Violent Femmes music prior to reading this thread, and it sort of infused my thought processes.)

 

[MetaBob]

Secure in the knowledge of how perfect they are for each other, they live Happily Ever After.

(I'd been listening to some Violent Femmes music prior to reading this thread, and it sort of infused my thought processes.)

Sounds like a "traditional" murder ballad. "Some tradition," I say. You should check out the Louvin Brothers if you haven't already, for the source.

That said, TVF's "Country Death Song" was entertaining, once. Now, at least for me, it's pritdam squicky.

It has been the best two-week period in either of their lives, but they are both despairing because it is coming to an end. They each (independently) decide that the best way to end it is with a murder-suicide, since life can only go downhill from here.

Ugh.

 

[MetaBob]

The arc came to me overnight, in its germ when I woke and worked out in more detail while I was still warm and comfy under the covers. At least up until the details of the denouement. The arc has everything to do with Becca's various mental ills. This is an unusual story, the way I like them, and it's about to get even more unusual, but should satisfy.

Best to all who replied or considered doing so. If you have any more ideas, I'm still open to reading them. The book should be finished in a couple more weeks, at the rate I write when I'm rolling, but then it'll be a matter of months before the finicky editor in me is ready to turn it loose.