Please Read My Story..

[Debonair]

Hello Friends....

I am new to Lit or should I say I am Virgin!

I am writing a story with Literotica Guru, WhisperingRain. She is a wonderful teacher. The name of the story is "Cross Roads" in Sexual Roleplaying forum. I am really excited about the creative aspect of the story and writing. I will be a better writer with your encouragement, support and suggestions.

I am young, but willing....

Please read my story... https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?threadid=166767

Thank you,

Debonair

 

[Guest]

We generally critique submitted stories, Debonair, not posts or threads on the Roleplay Forum.

If (or when) you compile your ideas into standard format, it will attract an audience ready to critique it as a story (it's certainly not there yet). As it stands now, it reads like a number of linked posts on the Roleplay Forum, which is not a bad thing, but it needs to take a BIG leap toward becoming a cohesive manuscript. It appears to have a storyline and a plot, but it does need heavy editing for grammar, punctuation, and style.

My suggestion is to try organizing it into a single piece, and continue working with WhisperingRain to smooth out the story edges until either you (or both of you) are satisfied you're ready to submit it as a story. Then do it, and come back here with a link to the posted story.

Good luck.