please judge

[Guest]

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Hey don't u wanna be someone?
Hey i've fallen so many times,
It always feels like up.
Hey cant love these empty words,
because nothing is always enough.

Hey dont sorrow taste so sweet,
Makes me real not something better,
I'm to scared to dissapoint you,
but am i to old to dream.

Hey does this life hurt,
every cut seems so familiar,
why does it hurt to care,
or find something to live for.

 

[Savage Kitten]

layne! Why don't you register and hang around for awhile? There's something you have to realize about this forum, too. You can't ask for feedback and be tenderhearted or overly protective of your work! Most of the poets here are very serious when it comes to poetry and they will tell you exactly how they think it is.

Now, register so you will have a PM box and an email so people can send you private feedback if they so desire. k?

Sk~