please give me feedback on my ob/gyn incest stories

[lustful_aztec]

my two stories are My Father the Ob/Gyn: My Daughter the Pregnant Slut part 1 and 2. they are good i promise that. but with your help my next stories can be better. they both have a HOT rating.



http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=58010

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=58644

 

[damppanties]

Hi,

I made it through half of your first story before the switching POVs made me go a little crazy. I think you should have stuck to one person's point of view and then written another story with the other's if you wanted both to be told. The mixture didn't work for me. Sorry.