Please educate me

[veryfaithfull]

I have never claimed to be be spelling expert but I thought that I did a better job then some of the commits have suggested. Please educate me about my spelling errors.
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-gift-104

 

[PennLady]

I have never claimed to be be spelling expert but I thought that I did a better job then some of the commits have suggested. Please educate me about my spelling errors.
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-gift-104

I'm reading along and have seen some minor things:

Lacey should be lacy.

You have some adjectives like "mid length" that should be hyphenated -- mid-length, mid-thirties.

There are some punctuation issues, especially in the dialogue.

For example:

"This is our classic black strapless evening mini dress." Lisa said. "Its form fitting and designed to enhance the bust while controlling the hips and belly."

should be:

"This is our classic, black strapless evening dress," Lisa said. "It's form-fitting and designed..."

Not the commas. Also in the first line, that was way too many adjectives.

controlling hips and belly's ...bellies

An exchange like this:
"Can you feel the tension Paul?" Lisa asked. "Yes." I stuttered.

Should be broken up
"Can you feel the tension, Paul?" Lisa asked.

"Yes," I stuttered.

And again, notice the commas before the close quote in the second line -- this is a mistake you make a lot.

G-string

two piece -- two-piece

Her lacy panty's -- Her lacy panties

other model's several -- models, plural not possessive

When her face meet my dick -- MET, not meet

She rubbed my cum across her skin like it was a luxurious bubble bath. -- women do not rub bubble bath over their bodies. Body lotion, yes. Bubble bath, no.

That's all I'll make note of, but there's more like that as you go along. I didn't notice any actual misspellings, more possessives where you should have plurals.

Hope it helped.

 

[veryfaithfull]

Thank You. Your advice will be helpful. Unfortunately I napped through most of my English classes.