Hislittlefucktoy
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- Jan 13, 2011
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Hi, everybody,
I write stories for my on line girl. She turns her webcam on, and I spin out stories for her. We both enjoy it.
A few weeks ago, she told me that she was sad that the stories got lost, and she wanted me to publish them. Our compromise was to submit them to lit. I spent about an hour editing each of the first two stories, and submitted them. The original idea was that she would submit them, but that is a violation of the terms of service, so I am submitting them using the account I set up for her (hence, the username.)
The first two stories, thus, received a single hour of editing, and it showed.
The third story I sat on for a week, and ran it through the mental wringer three times. Each time, I would cut out a certain number of words. This one started at 4100 words, and each time I cut it, I cut out about four hundred words (10% of the original work). I was surprised at how much could be cut out.
I might actually have over cut.
So, please give me your opinion of this story.
It's entitled "In the Elevator", it is submitted under the name "hislittlefucktoy", and it is in the BDSM category, because of certain story elements.
here's a link.
http://www.literotica.com/s/in-the-elevator-2
Dave
I write stories for my on line girl. She turns her webcam on, and I spin out stories for her. We both enjoy it.
A few weeks ago, she told me that she was sad that the stories got lost, and she wanted me to publish them. Our compromise was to submit them to lit. I spent about an hour editing each of the first two stories, and submitted them. The original idea was that she would submit them, but that is a violation of the terms of service, so I am submitting them using the account I set up for her (hence, the username.)
The first two stories, thus, received a single hour of editing, and it showed.
The third story I sat on for a week, and ran it through the mental wringer three times. Each time, I would cut out a certain number of words. This one started at 4100 words, and each time I cut it, I cut out about four hundred words (10% of the original work). I was surprised at how much could be cut out.
I might actually have over cut.
So, please give me your opinion of this story.
It's entitled "In the Elevator", it is submitted under the name "hislittlefucktoy", and it is in the BDSM category, because of certain story elements.
here's a link.
http://www.literotica.com/s/in-the-elevator-2
Dave
