philandering husband / neighbor's young adult daughter

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I find that my best stories stem from reality and/or my fantasies from real life.

I have a thing for a neighbor of mine, who I'm almost certain would never stray from his beautiful wife... But we talk occasionally when he comes into my workplace for his morning coffee.

I want to start something (probably a chain or multiple entry story, etc.) slow, almost painfully slow.

But I don't want to risk losing my potential audience.

So, if the characters don't actually have intimate relationship for a while, do you think my audience would stay if I put in a few fantasy montages, perhaps some masturbatory scenes?

And what if I introduce another character, perhaps her online lover... Is that too much?

Any input would be helpful thanks xx

 

[JustaSCOUNDREL]

From my POV, I'd say NO online lover. I would add your fantasies, the way you think about him at night, imagining him just a few feet away and what might happen if you just happened to walk out on your patio some hot night and he did too. Maybe thinking about him in the morning when he comes in for coffee and if he followed you into the back room or even into the bathroom. or maybe you followed him.

Sounds like it could be a good story and do let your fantasies run wild.

If/ when you write it do not knock it out in a few hundred words a good story here should be a full page at a minimum (3500 words) or even two pages, twice that. Generally the longer the story the better your marks.

Good luck and good writing.

Mike

 

[Black_and_White_Writer]

I've been interested in this. I have lost a few friends in online writing who've dropped out.

I suppose worrying about what people would say if they found out they'd been writing incest fantasy stories online would do to them. Heck I've had a few heated debates with one or three increasingly paranoid folk about that.

My fantasies tend to be more exotic. Think Lord of the Rings or Star Trek with lots off passionate, sweaty sexy fun or cheating or extra marital fun.

I do like those stories as they allow me to explore "what-if" scenarios. Which I find both healthy and completely normal.

As Anthony Hopkins once said "no one asked me if I'd eaten anyone before I auditioned for the part of Mr Lector."

 

[NiceNastyMann]

I find that my best stories stem from reality and/or my fantasies from real life.

I have a thing for a neighbor of mine, who I'm almost certain would never stray from his beautiful wife... But we talk occasionally when he comes into my workplace for his morning coffee.

The beginning to many a story - the chance meeting - she/he gazed upon him/her/her/him from afar...

I want to start something (probably a chain or multiple entry story, etc.) slow, almost painfully slow.

But I don't want to risk losing my potential audience.

So, if the characters don't actually have intimate relationship for a while, do you think my audience would stay if I put in a few fantasy montages, perhaps some masturbatory scenes?

Let's be honest here. This is erotica - and the audience expects things to happen. So they can fast forward to the naughty bits...

So yes. Your character needs to describe her fantasies, along with how she is pleasuring herself, where etc. "It was my break as he walked out the door. I rushed into the ladies room, thank god it was empty..." or "I glimpsed him out on their patio - he was nursing a beer, wearing only cutoff shorts. God he looked so gorgeous - I stood there behind the curtains, my hands stealing down the waistband of my panties..."

And what if I introduce another character, perhaps her online lover... Is that too much?

Any input would be helpful thanks xx

Since you are planning on a series - this would be what in music would be considered a bridge. A change in tempo - to keep everyone's interest.

And also - let's face it - you need to give the audience a reason to feel positive about your character. 'The object of her passion - his gorgeous wife has an online lover! Well then, it's not like your character is doing anything really all that bad.'