perfect little movements

[robynwildchild]

perfect little buttons
that would so perfectly belong on my floor
what one desired in the midst
is what there was to adore
adorned
in lines of
blue and yellow glitter
divided by white zigs and zags
a designed by artist refined in her glare
she was only a girl standing there
perfect little movements
delicate little fingers
devilsh
eyelids that stopped and quivered
i stood
back
to only watch from a distance
as she performed for all to stare
i spent those perfect little buttons on a daydream
that only got me hot back there

 

[WickedEve]

This is good: i spent those perfect little buttons on a daydream

 

[HomerPindar]

perfect little buttons
that would so perfectly belong on my floor
what one desired in the midst
is what there was to adore
adorned
in lines of
blue and yellow glitter
divided by white zigs and zags
a designed by artist refined in her glare
she was only a girl standing there
perfect little movements
delicate little fingers
devilsh
eyelids that stopped and quivered
i stood
back
to only watch from a distance
as she performed for all to stare
i spent those perfect little buttons on a daydream
that only got me hot back there

I agree with WE, I like that line, but also thought I'd drop the "that would" from the second line - it helps the meter and isn't vital as I see it.

HomerPindar

 

[robynwildchild]

hmmmm thanks.. both of you..