Overdoing the plot?

[Octavian]

I have in mind a story about a soccer player who encourages his wife to take a lover.
By the end of chapter one she has fucked the ten other players in his team, all eleven players of the opposition and the referee.

Am I spending too much time on the plot?

Octavian

 

[destinie21]

I have in mind a story about a soccer player who encourages his wife to take a lover.
By the end of chapter one she has fucked the ten other players in his team, all eleven players of the opposition and the referee.

Am I spending too much time on the plot?

Octavian

actually with a story like that the plot had better be damn good

 

[Guest]

Am I spending too much time on the plot?

Yes. Let me in on it.

Perdita

 

[Svenskaflicka]

What's a plot?

 

[dee1124]

What's a plot?

Isn't that what you buy in a cemetary?

 

[Liar]

What's a plot?

According to Google.com:
(I have no idea what that thing is supposed to do in a story.)

 

[Guest]

I have in mind a story about a soccer player who encourages his wife to take a lover.
By the end of chapter one she has fucked the ten other players in his team, all eleven players of the opposition and the referee.

Am I spending too much time on the plot?

Octavian

Yes, you need more sex! That's not nearly enough for one chapter.

What about the guys in the silly mascot costumes?

Lou

 

[Guest]

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[Guest]

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Lou,

What category is that?

Lime

PS - Be careful it could cross the line into beastiality

Very true. I think I'd err on the side of caution and go for Non-Human.

I guess it depends on how many lions, bears and squirrels were involved.

Lou

 

[Svenskaflicka]

According to Google.com:
(I have no idea what that thing is supposed to do in a story.)

It looks like an orgasm-curve! Well, in that case, add as many "plots" as you possibly can, Octavian!

 

[Guest]

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[CharleyH]

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Very true. I think I'd err on the side of caution and go for Non-Human.

I guess it depends on how many lions, bears and squirrels were involved.

Lou

Actually it is a fetish . . . they call themselves furries, I think, but what would I know?

 

[Guest]

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What, no puppies?

Lime

LOL!

I'm sure they'd make an appearance somewhere.

Charley, thanks for clearing that up.

Lou

 

[Boxlicker101]

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Lou,

What category is that?

Lime

PS - Be careful it could cross the line into beastiality

If the mascots are like unicorns or dragons or griffins or humans, that would be okay. If they are tigers or broncos or wombats, that would be a no-no

 

[Guest]

What about Jayhawks???

 

[Boxlicker101]

What about Jayhawks???

I don't think there is an actual thing called a jayhawk so they would be mythical and permissable. The Ohio State Buckeye is a plant and would probably also be acceptable.

 

[lucky-E-leven]

I don't think there is an actual thing called a jayhawk so they would be mythical and permissable. The Ohio State Buckeye is a plant and would probably also be acceptable.

Now there's a story just begging to be written, Box. Sex with a buckeye. Catchy.

~lucky

 

[Weird Harold]

According to Google.com:
(I have no idea what that thing is supposed to do in a story.)

That graph looks like the vote average after it hits the toplists with ten 5.0 votes.

Or the number of daily votes after it falls off the new stories list.

 

[lucky-E-leven]

That graph looks like the vote average after it hits the toplists with ten 5.0 votes.

Or the number of daily votes after it falls off the new stories list.

Amen to that!

~lucky

 

[Svenskaflicka]

No hawks or puppies!!!

Lit doesn't allow bestiality!

 

[pop_54]

I have in mind a story about a soccer player who encourages his wife to take a lover.
By the end of chapter one she has fucked the ten other players in his team, all eleven players of the opposition and the referee.

Am I spending too much time on the plot?

Octavian

Hmm ... Don't think you've thought it through enough yet mate ... can't see it working, or seeming believable until she's done the two coach's the visiting physio, and the away team bus driver ... Oh and I'd have the bus driver's puppy looking on with a bone-on if I were you to add a cuddly element to the whole thing.

Did she blow the referee by the way, or did he do the blowing up.

I agree with boxy, whatever you do, no Wombats, it just wouldn't work.

 

[Guest]

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. . . I agree with boxy, whatever you do, no Wombats, it just wouldn't work.

*giggle*

 

[Guest]

LOL!

That was priceless.

 

[lewdandlicentious]

What about Turkeys, for the gobbling, Geese, for the Gagging, and Ostriches, for the wrestling????

 

[Guest]

NO!